ObiWan
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Fair enough, good luck.
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Did not want to sign up on the site just to offer criticism so i hope you don't mind the feedback here. Couple of quick thoughts. Use the other senses, sight might be our primary one but you'll draw the reader in more if you invoke the others in your descriptions. You used blue as an adjective 4 times in the very first paragraph. Azure, cerulean, midnight. all shades of blue without using the same word twice. And on a much more subjective side, don't like the cover. Too anime. Now if that's what you were going for then cool but i think it might limit the "curb appeal".
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Guess i was the the only one thinking Qui Chang when i read Caine.
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Have none of these people ever read or seen a sci-fi story.
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Quote:Originally Posted by Zortel
In England, we just show public service announcements like this:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZDwHOYOqJVw
You may not want to watch if you're squeemish.
And no, it's not the 'If you hit me at 40 miles per hour, there's a seventy percent chance I'll die.' one.That's eff'd up.Quote:Originally Posted by Rabid_Metroid
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Me likey.
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Magocracy
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Quote:I know, right!Originally Posted by Balanced
What, no card for Weyland-Yutani?
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My heart goes out to them.
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Well now he doesn't have to steal a copy of Handbook for the Recently Deceased. R. I. P.
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I actually wished i had stopped reading when he had told me to.
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The end is nigh.
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It's a trap!
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I hope this is the movie that redeems the X-franchise.
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Kept me amused longer than most TV shows.
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Guess i'll have to lock the kids in the closet and go see this.
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Mister Fantastic...that's just silly.
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Galaxy Trio kicked ***!
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Needs more Guy Gardner.
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Clip doesn't pull me in.
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Sounds interesting. Maybe I'll go pick up the comic.
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The 13th Warrior.
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My favorite.
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I think it looks pretty cool. Do we know who's going to play Danridge or whatever the Vamps name was?
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Quote:Ugh, that hurt my head to read.Originally Posted by Venture
Welcome to The Singularity.
The question that is being asked here is essentially "what will superhuman heroes look like when the definition of 'human' has changed?" The answer is, as John W. Campbell told Vernon Vinge, "You can't write that story. Neither can anyone else".