Xertul

Canada wins!

Foo

Not Foo.

Okay. I lied. Foo.

Foo.

Various juices from concentrate.

I must apologise about my lack of an entry this month. To be honest, I haven't been around these forums that much lately, so this completly slipped my mind. School, for the most part, is the main factor.

Needless to say, I'm going to throw my vote out for Foo.

Good luck to the remaining contestants.

Cool theme! I've definetly got a couple ideas already in mind.

In particular, I'm thinking of using this classic Transformers comic cover. Although, which to character to use, I'm still quite unsure...

Can't wait to see what everyone else cooks up.

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For all the reasons stated by others, I too will have to vote for Milk_Weasel.

Although I do agree with The Foo that Xertul's doesn't look so much like a battle, but rather a lover's spat.

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YOU look like a lover's spat!

Baha, just kidding. But I do agree. My own piece is kind of dissapointing in terms of a "fight scene". I won't even try to defend it. I just sort of... Messed up.

I'll definetly be devoting more time and effort into next month, though.

I'm going to have to go with Projectionist on this one.

Good luck everyone.

Alright, so, looks like I just made it.

Ghost Widow VS. Positron

Nothing fantastic, to be sure. I'd originally envisioned a background and, well... Colors, for the most part. But yeah, there you go. Positron getting the sneak up on Ghost Widow.

I do kind of like how it turned out though.

I have no honest clue if I'll get my entry in on time this month. I recently got into the Art Institute up here, so I've been INCREDIBLY busy with that. I did have something started... I may end up posting that just to save myself from auto-elimination.

I do feel rather bad about doing that though... Mostly considering it's what I do every month. Next month, if I'm still around, I'll definetly take a day for myself, and knock out a finished piece.

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Arc #26931, "The Balance of Power Part I"
tl;dr: 3 stars. Offenses: weak theme, overpowered ally


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I haven't enough time to comment on everything, so I'll summarise: I very much appreciate you taking the time to do this, Venture! I definetly agree with several of the points you raised, and I'll be sure to look into fixing most of what I CAN fix.

Thanks a bunch for the review.

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Friends in Need (Of Body Parts) - Villainous (31005)
A Little RnR - Heroic (17523) click for Promotional Poster
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The Fan Club -- Heroic
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http://boards.cityofheroes.com/showflat....ue#Post13304513
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The Final Nemesis
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Here's a couple costumes I've recently made with this pack:

Raselle
Xer'Tul

Definetly loving this new pack.

Hey folks

Here's my arc, as well as the poster I whiped up for it, using a combination of Zbrush and photoshop. Unfortunately, it would seem that even using a poster to advertise your arc doesn't always work... Still sitting at 0 playthroughs.

Regardless:

Arc name: The Balance of Power
Author: Xer'Tul
Arc ID: 26931
Length: 4 missions long, 45 minutes to an hour to complete.
Faction: Custom: The Granox (2 elite bosses in the Arc)

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The paladins look cool, and having them fight alongside you is fun. But the aliens look too much like dark elves, if that is the look you were going for then you nailed it. But I think they could use a little work.

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Totally agreed. I'm still trying to nail down the look for those guys. I wanted them to be pale, and dark looking, as they are a race that lives below ground. The costumes, however, I had no idea what to do with them. That's something I'll be working on some more, for sure.

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Mission 2:

You tell the player at the start of the mission that the Paladins don't allow revenge, and that they cannot find out. But just inside the mission the player rescues a Paladin to assist the player inside the mission. This does not make sense to me.

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Actually, after accepting the mission, Theronius mentions that his friend will be meeting you there. A friend who owes him a favor. So, yes, while Maldrin is a paladin, he wont be going off to tell anyone about what Theronius is doing.

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Leaving the mission I am not really interested in playing the next step. For the sake of feedback I will, but you should be aware that at this point you have lost my interest.

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Haha, don't worry, you're not the only one. Even I, while running these first few missions, never really felt all that interested or motivated to keep going. I knew there was something wrong, but I couldn't quite pin down what that was. Now I've got a better idea of that.

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Great, a smaller map! Crap, an Elite Boss. The Elite Boss took me quite a while to kill. Consider adding a buffing/healing ally that the player has an option to find to make the boss fight more interesting.

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Bah. I'm probably going to have to switch maps then. I set the boss to appear at the back of the map, the middle, as well as the front, but everytime I loaded up the mission, he was always in the same spot, right at the beginning of the mission. Which is a tad bothersome.

As well, I did hide a Paragon City hero on the map to help you out against the fight with the boss, but considering the boss is the first thing you run into, I'm guessing there probably aren't all that many people going out to look for her. Especially since I don't mention her at all...

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This is the type of mission that makes a good climax, but after playing through Mission 1 & 2 it just makes me groan. Also, the final boss was underwhelming.

Final thoughts:

It has potential, but I think you need to work on the pacing and flesh out the story with more clues and boss dialogue. If you make changes let me know, I will play through it again.

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Will do, for sure.

I'm actually going to be working on it for most of today. I completly agree with you in regards to the first and second missions... They aren't much fun at all. So I'll be totally scrapping those and starting fresh. I might also condense the entire thing a bit... I feel I could probably get everything done in 4 missions instead of 5.

Thanks a bunch for the feedback! It's exactly what I needed.

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Also, if you get the chance feel free to check out my arc, #6999. I have spent a lot of time on it but can't get anyone to play it. Would love some feedback.

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I just finished playing this, and, I've got to be totally honest... It rocked. I really enjoyed running this arc. Great theme, nice flow, and I liked the look of the enemy group.

Just two things that stuck out for me:

-The contact felt very lifeless. Maybe that's how you meant him to be, but I didn't really feel motivated to do what this guy said at all. All the other characters in your story had great personality, though.
-The last mission map: Orenbega? Oh no! This is just personal opinion, of course, but I really don't like the Orenbega maps. I mean, it fits perfectly in a thematic sense, but it made me a little sad when I found out I'd have to run through those small tunnels to find the boss. But, like I said, that's just me.

In the end though, I gave you 5 stars. I really enjoyed the theme, the story progression, the characters, as well as all the little clues you threw in there. And fighting the last boss at the end felt rather epic.

Can't wait to see more from you.

Hey folks, I'm looking for a little feedback with an arc I've been toying around with since open beta.

Arc name: The Balance of power
Arc ID: 8391
Author: Xer'Tul
Length: 5 missions long, about 45 minutes to an hour to complete.
Premise: The story has you facing a rogue group of aliens, ehe Granox, bent on conquering this arm of the galaxy. You're enlisted to help by a man named Theronius, a Cosmic Paladin who had, long ago, been made the sole survivor of his species, thanks to the Granox. The story takes you aboard space vessels, asteroid bases, and underground cities, as you work to defeat the Granox, and enure piece in the galaxy.

If someone could give that a peek and let me know what I should fix up, that'd be great.

Hey folks, just a heads up:

I've already got most of these done, but I want to finish all of them before posting them up. I should have something for you guys by tomorrow evening hopefully.

I just spent a week at the Art Insitute, doing a workshop of sorts. Know what the main thing they taught us was?

CTRL+Shift+S! Every 15 minutes or so, save a new version of whatever you're working on. Turn it into a habit. That way, you'll never have to worry about losing hours of work, ever again!

Otherwise, I'm sorry to hear about your sketch. I totally know what that's like.

I'm afraid I've got my last 3. However, for those who did not make it, keep on eye out on this thread. As I finish this set of sketches, I may start another.

Hey folks.

So, every once in a while, when I'm feeling happy and all creative and what not, I decide to draw people. This is one of those times.

I have plans for 3 sketches thus far, and I need 3 more people. The first 3 to post here, who aren't already on my list, get some free art. And I mean 3. If you post after I've gotten all the people I need, I'm sorry. There will be other oppertunities for free art sometime in the future, however.

Anyways... The list so far:

-Buckeyestar's Invincibelle
-Hericane
-MikoReimu
-Thornster
-DeviousMe
-Bubbawheat

I'll need some nice, clear references by the way.

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lol don't say that, that's gonna make me think of this every time a char hits 20,30,40 or unlocks the 5th slot and gets a new costume look to post them up here in hopes of some artz lol

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Srsly.

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see?!?! and I'm prolly not the only one that'll think that way lol

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Haha, you're right, I'll have to fix that somehow...

Keep an eye out for a new thread (by me) popping up in a couple minutes.

A new look?! Then this demands... New art!

*Runs off to doodle something*

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My vote is for Xertul, really love the pose, would love to see it finished.

Close seconds are Tartyrsauce and Juggertha.

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Yoooouuu RAWK!

But, no, yeah, I'll get that thing colored eventually. I just need to find the time really.