I like your style. Really creative characters and weapons. Sometimes I feel ganked but it's always in a way that makes a little sense (the sinking of Dead City).
My turn! Critique meh!
Arc ID: 475246, "Bringing a Lord to Power"
"I'm only a simple man trying to cling to my tomorrow. Every day. By any means necessary."
-Caldwell B. Cladwell
((Darn. I made one too, but I'll just delete it later.))
Burning, your characters are inventive in the same vein that I'm not.
Whilst a Malta will always shoot you, Brawlers keep you guessing.
Soviet, the Malta are cool but feel a bit single-minded in their intentions, always out to shoot or gank someone.
Alright, bring it on.
I LOL when I saw two threads that are doing the same thing(and both credited to me). Im going to pick this one cause you asked for a critique to go along with it. Im not that great at critiquing though and Im not good at saying sweet or flattering things but Ill do my best.
DeviousMe:
The only references I know are your Vyachslav character. Really odd and creative character. It really makes me think and imagine a lot just picturing him/it. His personality makes me wonder though, was he a villain or a hero in his home world. I thought he was a villain but he acts too nice for that in GTOA. In battles, you dont go all crazy(if thats a good way to put it). Overall, a pleasure to RP with you.
Burning_Brawler:
The only references I can think of using is Pstorm from SH101. So far, I think youre afraid to try and describe something with words. Dont take that the wrong way, I just feel like youd rather post a pic from the character creator instead of just describing. Sometimes, theres just not enough costume options in that Char Creator for me. I havent really read enough of your stuff though, but are your posts usually really short?
Someone can critique me if theyd like. I know my posts tend to be a bit long, and I often describe my characters doing trivial things(scratching their head, adjusting their glasses, etc), and I suck at names(I spelled my characters name wrong for about 50 pages of one RP, and some names are unoriginal) but Im not *THAT* bad, right?
Let's see if I can get some links here...
Here's me trying to tell a story, although a bit corny.
Here's one of my favorite posts.
And finally, one that I feel is my better portrayal of a certain personality.
Alot of those really aren't even RPing if you ask me. More like just talking or telling stories.
To Brawler:
I do apologize if you felt ganked by me with that. The thing is, my brain thought of about 5 different ways to do that, and I chose the one that seemed most preventable. After all, your guys in that thread are going up against a few dimensional engineers who have been just about everyhwere in this galaxy and then some. They will manipulate things against you the more complicated they get, so here's a hint: the simpler things get, the less they can do with them. If you'd like, I'll grab another option for the pocket dimension rather than Acid's continuum crusher 
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Now, where was I? Ah yes - I do have to agree, you keep your words sparse sometimes, which can be a good thing if you want the reader's imagination to work hard. Personally, I try to give just enough detail so my readers can paint a picture with my words. Sometimes it doesn't work, I'll admit. 
Other than that, keep going with the myserious web you weave.
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To Lazarus and Leogunner
I haven't really gotten into the whole scheme of things with you two, so I'm gonna hold off on the critiques until I can gather a little more. But that don't mean you're out of the woods.
And about Vyachslav, Leo - that's the whole idea, hehehe. You'll find out what he's all about eventually 
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"If I had Force powers, vacuum or not my cape/clothes/hair would always be blowing in the Dramatic Wind." - Tenzhi
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First off, YOU STOLE MY IDEA, [censored] 
. Na but it's cool This is better than a thousand ppl having seperate "Hows my RP style" threads. GOOD WORK
Devious somethimes I feel like you go a little to uber with sheild and weapons. Somethimes I've had to sit there for ten minutes trying to figure out what to do.
Also I think you pull to much from outside charaters. All the RP's i'm in with you are in alternate dimensoins and your always talking with Vern or someone. yea.....
On the positive I think that you have wonderful characters that each have their own thought patterns. And you comeup with some stuff man. Not to mentoin great spelling. GOOD WORK.
As for Burning, You do a good Job handleing all your charaters. You should spruce something up a little bit. Think of ways to attack people using objects. Like smashing them into a car or such.
Ok, thanks for the input, Ryan. Not sure how I can use it yet, but I'll find a way.
My characters are basically 'imported' because Acid and his crew have about (make up some 4-digit number here ) pages of creative writing to them when I came up with them long ago. When I got CoX, I basically made the AT to fit my character.
And I do suppose I should turn down on the tech some, hehe. It's just that I work with a lot of that stuff in real life - mostly experimentally, of course. And other junk I just pulled outta the do-not-open-door in the back of my head...which incidentally always seems to open when I'm not looking...come to think of it, a lot of the stuff I build came out of that door...and I'm rambling again, I'm going to STOP now. 
"If I had Force powers, vacuum or not my cape/clothes/hair would always be blowing in the Dramatic Wind." - Tenzhi
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...yeah people critique me, you'll prolly say i'm a lil too "controlling" or dominant. It's genetic, believe me, i try to work around it.
i enjoy writing my own stuff, unfortunately i have YET to finish anything (I had a VERY long story going that i was going to have a friend draw but...she never drew more than one page, then i started writing stuff with my laptop but it broke, so i writer stuff by hand when i feel the urge)
I have, give or take, between ten and twenty different incomplete stories featuring about thirty characters total, some of which transition into new roles in different stories
So, yeah, a couple weeks ago i decided to try an RP on here. Already had a clash about my style...learned from it though
I don't like having my characters just do something and not explain WHY they did it.
Plague, The thing you have to keep in mind always is that an RP is like a cooperative writing project. It's not your story, you're only playing a part in it and you have to be careful not to step on the other writer's toes by avoiding things like commandeering their characters, one-shotting them in fights, and such. If you keep that in mind whenever you write a post for an RP you'll do fine.
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Plague, The thing you have to keep in mind always is that an RP is like a cooperative writing project. It's not your story, you're only playing a part in it and you have to be careful not to step on the other writer's toes by avoiding things like commandeering their characters, one-shotting them in fights, and such. If you keep that in mind whenever you write a post for an RP you'll do fine.
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Yeah, that pretty much says everything you need to know. Another way to look at it is, if someone wasn't sure about your character or their motives,goals, powers or potential would you want that someone to force your character into a plot, easily defeat your character, etc. Pretty much just treat other characters like you want yours to be treated(in a broad sense).
Or put more simply: If you wouldn't like it done to your character then don't do it to someone else's.
True enough. After all, it's a game, and you want to 'win', but a text-based RP should also create a good story that an outsider can follow and find entertaining.
"If I had Force powers, vacuum or not my cape/clothes/hair would always be blowing in the Dramatic Wind." - Tenzhi
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Just a random interjection here, but I came to this RP forum with the idea in my head that to fight someone, you tell them what you'd do ahead of time and then let them be hit or react as they see fit until they counterattack the same way. I've noticed that very few people seem to do that, so I've mostly stopped.
Anyway, open fire on myself! Rawr!
Statesman said let there be heroes, and there were heroes.
Lord Recluse said let there be villains, and there were villains.
NCsoft said let there be nothing, and there was nothing.
I'm the same way, Khel.
And also...
Please critique my RPing style as you see fit - as I've said, I'm a relative n00b to this style and I hope I'm behaving properly. If you would be so kind as to suggest improvements to my style, I would be most appreciative. :P
I will critique others' styles when I have a solid chunk of time to sit and analyze.
Japancakes.
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Plauge, the one thing I have for you is. when you add some spaces between paragraphs and seperate your ideas a bit.
It may just be me but when I look at yours posts for too long the words seem to blend in making a little dificult to read.
Lets see, I dont really have any negatives about any of you guys/girls, except...er...I guess I don't have any. Critique me, btw I know 99% of the time I make short posts, but I prefer to let the other person react to my actions how they choose.
Shin,
You're doing fine, I think. You're balancing yourself well.
Khell, you ((And Billyboy, if he posts here, just for reference.)) really, REALLY bring characters to life. I can make Curtis a cowboy, Reikoff a badass and Marcus a techie but you can really make multi-dimensional personalities. I respect that.
Essex, you're far better at balancing yourself than I am. Not only that, you'll take a punch ((From Curtis even)) and not magically resist it. That's a style that shows that you're far more experienced at this than I.
Soviet, I like all the stuff that goes on between your malta soldiers when they're arguing and such, its pretty funny.
Khell, youre one of the guys I look toward as an example for myself. I try to RP like you(and some of the other experienced RPers) to keep myself in check although I tend to break some of the rules anyway. Needless to say, your style is good.
Essex, if youre a noob at RPing, you started out way better than I did. You keep yourself balanced and interesting and you perform well even with all the work you put on yourself. Youve got, what? 6? 7? characters you keep up with in GTOA and keep everything running quite smooth. I wouldnt call that noob in any respect.
Shinji, my only grip with your style is it seems kind of random(at least when you first meet someone). You have your characters walk up to random people and just talk with them like when Shinji asked Billyboy if he could hang out with him. Maybe thats just how your character is though, but thats the only problem I can see. You keep yourself pretty balanced and entertaining.
Like the idea of this thread! Please critique me, I'm looking forward to seeing how I can improve!
Khel, it's always a huge pleasure RPing with you. When you're in a thread with me, I know it's going to be a good one. Your characters are fun and easy to interact with, and they all have a developed personality that makes it even better!
Devious, you're great at writing, but you do it too fast! Nothing wrong with that, I can just never keep up with how fast you write your posts! Plus, they're always so lengthy that I freak out that I need to read so much to catch up. But, aside from that, your RPing is great. Your characters are well developed and fun to play with! My only other gripe might be that you always have something to counter anything. When you were attacking Blight Lord, I couldn't help but feel kind of bad for the guy, you just seemed impossible to defeat. You write well and your inventions make sense, but your stuff always ends up so powerful it becomes a bit daunting, and none of my character can ussually come close to being able to counter with the limits I've set before them.
Soviet, I really like how you deal with the Maltans, but I think you may want to try straying from them once in a while! Your characters are great, but they don't interact well with other at all, and sometimes you'll step on others peoples' toes so your character can do something that is awesome and cool, but is ultimately hogging the spotlight a bit. If I could give you a tip, it would be to have your characters be without an answer to something for once, instead of having a huge weapon ready for anything.
And to all three of you, you're all always clear on what you're trying to saw. I've never failed to understand you. Good spelling and grammar make the RPing much funner, so I compliment you on that too!
BB is one of the best RPers I've had the fortune to play along with. He's able to adequately switch between points of view and describe an individual char's psychology very, very well.
My only real qualm is in your Crey profiles, where you seem to get caught up in excitement and not hold a professional air or tone as would be expected with Crey officials. Then again, though, maybe BB's Crey supervisor isn't a stone-faced stoic.
I have absolutely no qualms at all with Khel, in all the RPs I've ever been graced with him with. It is to my deep regret that I don't play on Protector, because I have a feeling that if we were to RP in-game, it would be the best damn thing EVER in the history of things that are AWESOME.
Aw, Terminus, you made me blush! 
Thanks so much for the kind comments! And in regards to the Crey profile, I wasn't entirely trying to make it from the Crey point of view, but was more trying to explain his backstory in a place that several people could see. I doubt that one of those agents would have explained it as efficiently if they were trying to make him look like a hooligan, so I just put the backstory I wrote and added a few Creyish assesments at the end.
As for you, Terminus, you're just great! You have a great way of explaining details that I could never wrap myself around! I loved your explanation of Croatoa, it really put me in the mood, and it was like I was there! I don't really know of any characters you've made but Xiu, but her backstory is awesome! She's full of personality and was a fun match for Billyboy to talk to! I'd love to ruin my good comments with a bad one, but I really don't see anything wrong at all with your posts, you're totally awesome! The only thing I can say is this: Post more and in more RPs!
Morgant, ((Who, FYI, is a Virtuian as myself,)) I've only RP'ed with you in-game, and I have to say, you really, REALLY handle your characters well. Morgant is great to intereact with, and conniving and plotting against people at the D that one time was some pretty good fun. You get quadruple points for maturity for apologizing for a certain incident that wasn't even near your fault, and I have to say, I'm having trouble saying anything bad about you.
Roleplay on some of my threads, whydoncha?!
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My only other gripe might be that you always have something to counter anything. When you were attacking Blight Lord, I couldn't help but feel kind of bad for the guy, you just seemed impossible to defeat.
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Blightlord getting pity? Gah, I need to show some more of my Fan Fics plot lines in threads .
Any other critiques for me? I acknowledge my lack of detail, and I've caught myself doing it for two different reasons.
1. I forget that the reader doesn't know what my chars look like, and I don't bother describing him/her. Or, in the case of my fan fics, they were originally written for my SG and they knew what my chars looked like. When I moved them onto the CoX boards, I didn't do any re-writing.
2. Sometimes I think describing things slows down the pace of a post I wanted to be more action and leave the reader kind of... pumped up a bit by the end. The details I sometimes fear will take the edge off the cliff-hanger, ending, fight finish, etc.
Arc ID: 475246, "Bringing a Lord to Power"
"I'm only a simple man trying to cling to my tomorrow. Every day. By any means necessary."
-Caldwell B. Cladwell
Okay, according to Leogunner's suggestion, I am hereby starting an attempt to gather together the recent requests for feedback on people's roleplaying styles. I am hoping that eventually a moderator will assist me in consolidating these threads and preferably sticky this so people can find it easily.
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Right then, here are some simple rules to keep this place organized:
1. If you are opening your RP style to critique from others, please say so explicitly. Some people who are RPers may not yet want their own styles evaluated until they have a better idea of what others are doing.
2. If you are critiquing someone else's RP style, please give the name of the person and address the critique as if you were speaking to them in person. Do not assume that simply because you are replying to this person's last post everyone will automatically understand what's going on.
3. Please keep this thread clear of flames, lewd language, and so on according to the standard guildelines of this forum.
4. Please keep all criticism CONSTRUCTIVE unless otherwise asked by the person who wants their style/characters/whatever critiqued. Remember, this is a place for feedback and suggestions, not "I don't like you!"
All right then, I think I've covered all my bases, so let this thing begin.
I'll extend an olive branch then and request a critique of my own RP style (Don't kill me!
"If I had Force powers, vacuum or not my cape/clothes/hair would always be blowing in the Dramatic Wind." - Tenzhi
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