Atta

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Really enjoying this story Shimmer, just one teenny weeny little problem with it though...

Atta's a wuss!! No, really! I kicked his sorry backside on my PB back at level 12!

But keep it coming!

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*sigh*

Did you not read the explanation?

'Course I did!

Like I said, loving the story...






He's still a wuss though!

sucks tho when there are a few shadow cysts in there if ur teaming with PBs or WSs tho, that hurts...

Shimmery sidestepped carefully around the turn of the cave, the details of Devi's plan still spinning in her head.

There were no characteristic sounds of Trolls in the distance. No pounding of fists, no rasping grunts birthed by another neanderthal fight for superiority.

"Only the guards will be here." Devi said as he strode past her. His voice seemed to echo back from every crevice of the pitch black network of tunnels surrounding them.

"Shouldn't we be quiet?" Shimmery whispered cautiously. "I can't see more than two feet in front of me..."

Devi set his arm alight and continued walking forward. "Better?" He laughed. "And don't worry, I told you, Julius told Nash - all the Trolls are out beating up every member of the Family they see until they get their hands on some Su-" A boulder hit Devi squarely in the chest and sent him flying to the ground with a thud. Shim froze the two trolls in their tracks as Devi leapt back to his feet.

The frozen Gardvords stared back blankly for less than a second, before Devidose incinerated them in a tower of flame and a shower of sparks. Their charred bodies fell limply to the ground.

Her eyes widened. "Are they..?"

"No" Devi heaved one of the bodies onto his shoulder. "Let's go. Oh, and be quiet."

cool, its good Shim, wanting to see how it ends now

Excellent work, maybe you should get together with one of the artists on the forum and have a Shimmery comic?

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Excellent work, maybe you should get together with one of the artists on the forum and have a Shimmery comic?

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Ask, and ye shall have the amazingness of the Shimmery Comic:

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Ask, and ye shall have the amazingness of the Shimmery Comic:

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That kicks [censored] - are we going to get adaptations for the earlier parts too?

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Excellent work, maybe you should get together with one of the artists on the forum and have a Shimmery comic?

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Ask, and ye shall have the amazingness of the Shimmery Comic:

Adapted From The Last Excerpt

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lol, nice one, altho im not too sure on the representation of Devidose there... O.o

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Excellent work, maybe you should get together with one of the artists on the forum and have a Shimmery comic?

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Ask, and ye shall have the amazingness of the Shimmery Comic:

Adapted From The Last Excerpt

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lol, nice one, altho im not too sure on the representation of Devidose there... O.o

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Lol

Yeah... Devi was a little 'jolly' there (And he and Shimmery are both 5'8)

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Excellent work, maybe you should get together with one of the artists on the forum and have a Shimmery comic?

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Ask, and ye shall have the amazingness of the Shimmery Comic:

Adapted From The Last Excerpt

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lol, nice one, altho im not too sure on the representation of Devidose there... O.o

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Lol

Yeah... Devi was a little 'jolly' there (And he and Shimmery are both 5'8)

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no, in RL we're that height, Devi is 6' 6", the standard height for my male toons, altho given the alts i have being one or another form OF Devi, they kinda have to be the same height

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Excellent work, maybe you should get together with one of the artists on the forum and have a Shimmery comic?

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Ask, and ye shall have the amazingness of the Shimmery Comic:

Adapted From The Last Excerpt

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lol, nice one, altho im not too sure on the representation of Devidose there... O.o

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Lol

Yeah... Devi was a little 'jolly' there (And he and Shimmery are both 5'8)

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no, in RL we're that height, Devi is 6' 6", the standard height for my male toons, altho given the alts i have being one or another form OF Devi, they kinda have to be the same height

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You said Devi was 5'8 in the 'Compare yourself to your Hero' thread

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Excellent work, maybe you should get together with one of the artists on the forum and have a Shimmery comic?

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Ask, and ye shall have the amazingness of the Shimmery Comic:

Adapted From The Last Excerpt

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lol, nice one, altho im not too sure on the representation of Devidose there... O.o

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Lol

Yeah... Devi was a little 'jolly' there (And he and Shimmery are both 5'8)

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no, in RL we're that height, Devi is 6' 6", the standard height for my male toons, altho given the alts i have being one or another form OF Devi, they kinda have to be the same height

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You said Devi was 5'8 in the 'Compare yourself to your Hero' thread

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woops

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Excellent work, maybe you should get together with one of the artists on the forum and have a Shimmery comic?

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Ask, and ye shall have the amazingness of the Shimmery Comic:

Adapted From The Last Excerpt

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lol, nice one, altho im not too sure on the representation of Devidose there... O.o

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Lol

Yeah... Devi was a little 'jolly' there (And he and Shimmery are both 5'8)

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no, in RL we're that height, Devi is 6' 6", the standard height for my male toons, altho given the alts i have being one or another form OF Devi, they kinda have to be the same height

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You said Devi was 5'8 in the 'Compare yourself to your Hero' thread

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woops

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I'll be sure to make Devi somewhere between 5'8" and 6'6" next time...whatever that is in MS Paint pixels.

Okay - There will be two more parts of Atta, and then I'll be moving on to another story (I haven't quite confirmed a title yet)

It will continue on from this; but it won't be about Atta.

Anyway:-

*morphs into writer-monkey*

Atta lay slumped in his throne atop a mountain of scrap, his neon 'Happy Hour' sign sending a nervous flicker of unnatural light across the dark cave. The charred body of a Gardvord landed at his feet. The two guards at his side looked up to see Devi silhouetted in the entrance.

"Morning Atta, How are you?" He said sarcastically. "Love what you've done to the place."

Atta grunted incomprehensibly at his guards, and motioned to Devi with a jerk of his fist. They began walking slowly down the mountain of garbage, clenching their fists. They were hungry for a fight. Atta watched from his throne with a smug grin as they grew closer.

Devidose folded his arms in defiance, and, on cue, Shimmery teleported silently from the shadows to the back of Atta's cave.

The first guard reached him, and pounded his chest with a snarl. Devi smiled. "Well it's lovely to meet you too!" He threw a ball of fire between the two trolls and the explosion rippled and echoed across the cave. The first troll slumped to the ground, and the second raised a charred eyebrow before he fell dumbly at his side.

Atta flashed him a surprised smile and snarled something at Devi. Their eyes met menacingly as a slow smile spread across Devidose's face.

Atta began his descent down the pathetic heap of garbage just as a terrified shriek rang out across the cave.

Devi turned to see a dozen trolls chasing Shimmery across the dirt, led by another of Atta's guards. She quickly jumped upto the top of Atta's throne and sent a storm of Ice raining down upon the trolls. They began to drop to the floor, but the guard was still standing there smirking, unaffected.

"You think a little hail is going to hurt me?" He snarled.

As she tried to back away, she tripped over a bent piece of scrap metal and went sprawling onto her back, just as Atta shoved Devi effortlessly out of his way in his attempt to escape from the caves.

"Shim!!" Devi yelled.

"Get Atta."

A web grenade sprung up around Atta's legs, and Shimmery's eyes widened in terror as the Troll guard stood over her.

pfft, n00b...

F6, F6, F6, F6, F6, F6,

Shimmery sent a bolt of Ice into the Troll's beady eyes, and used the second it gave her to scramble backwards.

Devidose threw the rest of his web grenades in a tangle around Atta's legs and tossed a blazing bolt of fire at the leader of the Trolls.

The guard pulled back his enormous green fist and swung it at Shimmery, knocking her to the ground once more.

Atta flexed his muscles and effortlessly broke free of the six web grenades as Devi's jaw dropped incredolously.

The guard laughed menacingly and raised a huge boulder above Shimmery, as Atta pushed Devidose over as carelessly as he would a domino. He snarled something and raised his fist high into the air, as a bolt of Ice hit him in the back. Distracted, he turned around dumbly to see where it had came from. "EMBERS TO INFERNO!!!" Devi roared, and the Troll guard sent the boulder plunging into Shimmery's chest.

Devidose panted, trying to regain his breath.

Atta lay slumped on the ground, unconscious, with the flames from the inferno still flickering. Devidose turned to see the Guard bashing the boulder into Shimmery's chest with all his might.

"NO!!" He sent an arc of flame into the Troll and he fell limply to the ground.

He ran over, to see Shimmery lying there, covered in blood and struggling the breathe. "Devi..." She reached out her hand. "I'm sorry..."

And her body teleported away...

THE END


My writing will continue pretty much immediately in a new story - would you guys prefer it in Creative or Roleplaying?

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My writing will continue pretty much immediately in a new story - would you guys prefer it in Creative or Roleplaying?

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Roleplaying!
Makes it easier to find for me
Although I must admit that this does fit in with Creative...

I confess I only found it by chance - probably the first time I ever looked at the roleplaying section when I found this. It's also the only reason I've been checking back on the roleplay section since I would have thought people looking for stories would be more likely to see it in creative.

You could of course link to the next story in this thread, and link back to this story in the new thread tho.

Whatever style you prefer, the Atta story is excellent.
My only complaint is that its over now.

Be looking forward to your next one

Thanks I'm actually dying to write the next one, but Mr Quilty is writing an Interlude about Devidose looking for Shimmery, so I'm waiting for that

Thats some nice writing shimmery