BlackStar Rising Take two , WIP pencils
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Aaron123,
Posted on: 2006-09-30 01:18 in Multi-Media Fan Creations
Very nice there DB. The lines are clean and the flow of the piece works well. And any art of good ole States being given the dentist express is always great. :3
I think the piece might work better if you shift Black's shoulders the opposite way. Left and right shoulders, swtiched in hieght. That'll put more downward force into the punch and make for more circular energy. As is stands, it seems like there's very little power in the punch, judging from his body position. No followthrough, so to speak.
I love the way States is worked into the border. I think that's awesome and should be left that way. It makes for a good balance to the parts on the right and it's not too obstructive. Your anatomy is looking great. One of the things that always impresses me is that you can so easily mix the simplistic cartoony style with more realistic muscle structure and fullness.
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Statesman looks like he's on drugs :P
Poor Statesman is everybody's punching bag 
Love it Scarfy, as I always say, your style is unique and wonderful.
Nice right cross! Now follow up with a knee to the head?
Great pic Scarf!
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Either BlackStar has unlocked the super secret elongation power set, or you 've just twisted his neck too much.
Nice art, Sarf !
Me love very much.
That looks great scarf! I think it looks pretty much perfect.
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Actually, he really DOES have the Super Secret Elongation powerset. Whatever you do, don't pull down his pants...
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okies I'll try switching up the shoulders suiichi 
thanks everyone for the feedback
<3 you guys
Yeah, I'd have to second Suichiro, that punching shoulder should really be the lower one. Other than that I think he looks great!!! 
I love how States is breaking the border XD
im changing it imchanging it
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right after a shower and breakfast
depending on how stylized you are looking to go I think it actually looks quite good as it is. on the critiqueside...I can see the stretching ability people have mentioned previously. this is due to the arm 'curving' combined with being a smidge to long. also I think the head is a tad large for the body.
either way...looks durn good thus far and looking forward to your next update on it. ~
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Pffft, slacker
Lookin good Scarf! Can't wait to see the finished piece.
okies
1) head too big
2) shoulders should be reversed for a more powerful punch
anything else ?
I don't think the head is too big at all! It fits with your style which, like mine, generally has slightly bigger heads than normal. For a Dragonberry head I think it's fine
There's something about the crotch that's drawing my eye, but I can't for the life of me figure out what it is.
No, not like that you pervs!!! 
ahahhhahahahah roflmao !!!!
sure star sure
on the crotch he actually has a bulge where he umm err stores his err gun ...yeah thats it
Alot of folks give their stooper guys a ken crotch , it was actually a lil bit more pronounced but it seemed to draw you in to much soo I had to get rid of his Hypno crotch
I think he head and neck are fine really. It's the style you draw in, more than it's any actual error on your part. I've been drawing long enough to be able to tell the difference in choice and accident most times.
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Beautiful as always, Scarf!
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I disagree, the neck is just a tad too long, IMO.
ehh I'll be keeping the neck leangth thanks tho .
my current plans are to fix the shoulders a bit and maybe maybe yutz around with the head
Looking really really nice there Scarfy.
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There's something about the crotch that's drawing my eye, but I can't for the life of me figure out what it is.
No, not like that you pervs!!!
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It's okay Star, we understand. With all the recent excitement it's only natural to have some built up hormones
Okies so I posted this piccy a lil bit ago Blackstar First attempt pencils And got a good bit of feedback on the pose so I went back and fixed a few things based on suggestions from the forums and thought I'd see If I was closer .
As always comments are welcome and appreciated
BlackStar Take Two , new version . pencils