Joe_Black

Originally Posted by Cyborg1

Not a story arc or even a mission but rather a channel for us to discuss Architect stuff in game with.
Edit - Then I go and forget to list the channel. <headsmack> "AE discussion" without quotes of course.

Originally Posted by Joe_Black

On second thought, I am going to wait till I17 drops before I tweek my Ghost Widow arc.

Word on the street is that MA arcs will have double the capacity they currently have right now.

I am already at the 100% cap on my arc currently and with the ideas you have given me I want to do the tweeking correctly with a free hand of arc memory space to do the story justice!

I will keep you posted!

Originally Posted by DoctorParadox

Joe, evidently, people aren't interested. Bumping doesn't change that. and when people DO look at this thread, they won't be impressed by your tactics.

Originally Posted by BlueBattler

Thanks, and go right ahead.

Originally Posted by BlueBattler

And with that, the story is complete.

Originally Posted by BlueBattler

More than once, I thought of killing Father.

While he lived, he was a threat to me, to my plans. He had planned my birth and the course of my life—and he would brook no disobedience. The moment that he realized that I had no intention of being his tool, he would decide that my usefulness was at an end.

One of us would have to die, I told myself over and over.

And yet, I could not quite bring myself to kill him.

If I had been a man, it would have been much simpler. If I killed him then, his organization would fall into line behind me. The son can replace the father, but the daughter—no matter how capable—is not given such courtesy.

The Family is rather an old fashioned organization.

So I could not kill him directly. If I did, then his organization would be subsumed by another branch of the Family, and I would be declared persona non grata … and I would become a target. I was good, but not even I believed that I could survive being the target of every hit man in the Rogue Isles.

My self education had include an extensive study of poisons—with a name like Belladonna how could I not be interested in poison?—but my father’s wariness regarding what he ate and drank bordered on prescience. After a few futile attempts, I discarded that possibility as being impractical.

And to be honest, I rather admired him.

He was not the strongest or bravest. He was not a great tactician or strategist. In a one on one fight with the least of his henchmen he would have been easily defeated.

But he was brilliant. He was a master of betrayal. He had not risen to his position by being an easy target, and I stood in admiration of his ability to survive no matter what came his way.

I did not love him, though.

I never loved him.

And he never loved me.

And yet, somehow I did not want to him to die. I knew that I would be safer if he were gone. My life would be my own. But a world without my Father in it somehow seemed … empty.

He did not love me, but he needed me—if only to serve his plans.

It may not have been love, but it was the closest thing to it that I had ever known, and I was loathe to give that up.

I did not then think that love existed. I had listened to Jezebel’s explanations of it—but I no more understood it than a blind man can comprehend the color red. You cannot understand what you have never had, what you have never seen.

But there was to come a time when I would learn what love is. I did not seek it. I did not want it. I would have refused it if it had been offered to me.

But it came to me all the same.

Originally Posted by Golden Girl

I will - as long as you tell me who/what/where/how your Poser sig image got such neat looking star patterns

Originally Posted by ScionofSatan

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Check my arc out and tell me what you think. (MA: 101857)


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Heya Joe,

Please don't take this the wrong way. I started your arc, but didn't finish it. The reason: it isn't finished. I say that not because the missions are unbalanced or the story is horrible, it's not. However, you DESPERATELY need to proof and rewrite the text, particularly the contact stuff. In the first mission alone, I counted over 14 typos and grammatical errors, from run on sentences to missing punctuation to misspellings. And that was just in the mission intro and mission accept dialogues. By the time I finished my notes, there were only 18 minutes left on the mission clock!

Get a friend or an sg-mate to run it and proof it for you. It's very difficult to proof your own stuff. Your mind sees what you meant to write instead of what you actually DID write.

I'll gladly run it again after it's done, but I don't want to tank your star rating unfairly. Lest you think I'm being A-R about this, consider: This is an exercise in creative writing. If I'm being distracted by that kind of thing, how am I going to appreciate the story you're trying to tell?