FloatingFatMan

Been meaning to comment on these...

First, I LOVE how you've taken screenshots and made them look handy drawn... Very creative use of the filters in Photoshop that is, and very well done, looked very 'comicy'.

Now, on to the story. I though it got off to a very good start and progressed fairly well. The only REALY problem I have with it is that you start to incorporate game mechanics and leetspeak in story. Mentioning things that accuracy debuffs, whilst maybe germain to the story, should really not be referred to in the terminology of the game mechanics. Also, I cringed at the first "LOL". Please don't do that, it's the fastest way to destroy a story and I felt like not reading the rest of it at that point... The mentioning of people coming online, supergroups, teams, timed missions, things like that, is all done as OOC material and either shouldn't be in the story at all, or needs reworking to make sense in the story.

Finally, the narrative. I found a lot of it fairly hard to actually see as it wasn't contained in a box, like realy comics are. You might want to try that as it DOES help.

Overall though, apart from the things above, I enjoyed the comic, and like I said, the way you've presented the screen shots is REALY effective. Look forward to seeing more!

So, where's Issue 5 then?

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Guests will get the opportunity to try the latest in body scanning and imaging technologies designed by Josephine Mathers

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Hey.. Jo offered! And she IS a close personal friend! (And Ellie got it dirt cheap too! )

Ellie rather likes ZorTel Industries products actually (not just because of the nice contract she landed either!), and if Jo hadn't offered, she would have called them for a quote!

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But where is it?

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Argh! Silly me!

You can find the boutique less than 1 minutes walk from the tram station in Galaxy City, situated in the row of shops found directly behind the station. The store is the second on the right and is easily distinguishable as a white building with a large pink sign proclaiming "Ellie's"

Oh, and regular opening hours are 10 till 5:30, Tuesday to Saturday. Home visits can be arranged for special design consultations.

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Do family get discounts?

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Didn't Inny just get a FREE costume?

But yes, of course they do! Just pick up a loyalty card on your way out...

Today is the day of the Grand Opening of Ellie's Boutique! Providing custom designed clothing for the discerning hero!

The party starts at 10am ((Yes, I know, I'm late!)), and will be kicked off with the arrival of the special guest star, Swan! Wearing a brand new costume custom designed by Ellie!

Guests will get the opportunity to try the latest in body scanning and imaging technologies designed by Josephine Mathers, and one lucky customer, chosen completely at random, will win a complete costume ensemble, specially designed just for them!

Plenty of food and drink will also be provided for the guests and Ellie hopes everyone has a great time!

Loyalty cards are available on request, giving customers a 10% saving on all purchases. For bulk design requests or any other special queries, please see the hostess and owner, Eloise Smith or her assistant, Yoko Hatori, who will be pleased to help.

I tried oh so VERY hard.. I really did..

Brick and family

I'm sorry!

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Okay... well, how would she reactto a discreet letter being left on her doorstep from the Ministry of Superhuman Affairs (my take on the English Supers Agency)?


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I guess we'll see should such a letter arrive.

But it would have to be of pretty great import, as Miss Ellie has retired from hero activities. She's persuadable, but it would have to be pretty important... Something to think about

Oh, and that's very likely what such a UK government department WOULD be called!

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Hmm. Um, FF, stop me if I go off the mark here, but wasn't Ellie considering leaving the Cirque at one point? Now, if I'm barking up the wrong tree, tell me. I'm making NO demands for you to leave an SG you'd enjoy.


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As yet, she is undecided.

She's torn between loyalty to her 'family', and some distastefull activities.

And we could all laugh back at the welsh mountain boy...

Red, I'm interested, but Miss Ellie (A London girl) is currently in the Cirque... And I honestly have not been able to play an alt long enough to get into it...

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Since you mentioned SWG Hoppy... WoW an RPG? I've been on one of their Roleplay servers... I don't think so.

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*poke* That's Guild Wars mate!

Still... You're right about SWG too!

At least WoW TRY, by having servers as official RP ones... It's not really Blizzards fault people still go OOC...

No offence Pious.. but crossposting is against the forums rules...

I don't see how they win? How could they possibly win? What are they winning?

Just sell off the components in your base until you're left with the entrance room, and forget about it. No one is winning anything!

'Course I did!

Like I said, loving the story...






He's still a wuss though!

Really enjoying this story Shimmer, just one teenny weeny little problem with it though...

Atta's a wuss!! No, really! I kicked his sorry backside on my PB back at level 12!

But keep it coming!

There's one flaw with that though CK... Dark can't stand Mileena... And Mileena doesn't particularly like him very much!

Hmmm.. public location? Certainly... Gossip columns live on that stuff...

Stuff overheard from more private locations? I'd expect the paper to get an IC letter of complaint.

Take, for example, the gossip of the Doc kissing Ellie. Now she's likely to be a tad embarrassed about that, espcially if the reason for it came to light too!!! Doesn't mean she'd DO anything though, it happened pretty darn publicly!

So, for me and my toons Hikari, anything that goes on in a public place I consider fair game. Anything you come accross from other sources, could get a letter of complaint to the paper. BUT, it will always be IC...

For whatever it's worth guys, I'm REALLY sorry if anyone's taken umbrage at my post. I was trying to be light hearted...

Please don't be grumpy!!!

Here here!!! Seeing as my character is one of these "other women", I agree with Aisla here!!!

Thank god the paper hasn't found out about the earlier catnip incident that sparked that kiss off, or the biogelatin clones of Ellie the Doc made... That'd ruin his reputation in short order! ;p

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Dude.. Currently at GG there is a Russian themed SG, and a Golden Age Heroes themed one. These in addition to people main toons is quite a lot already... You really think people have time for a third?

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Heh, remember not all the Roleplayers out there are 'GGers'.

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That's very very true, far be it from me to suggest anything different.

Red_Saint, however, is a GGer!

Crow wouldn't stand a chance... Grav is WAAAAY cuter!

Oh... and I have a story.. But it's waiting on something in Issue 5 before I send it to Hiki...

Cooo!! Miss Ellie gets a mention! (Even if it does make her sound slightly like a tartlett! )

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Oh and Hi Nova (FFM), how's things mate?

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Hey Nuc! You came back from the dark side then? What you still doing on Deviant? Get over to Onion! We have a better class of wierdo!

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I Love 'And Now For Something Completely Different' - but i've not seen any other Monty Python feature-lengths. Basically because I love the sketches but I heard the films were a [censored] amalgamation of the sketches.

NINJA-EDIT: But yeah it'd be nice to see it. I've heard a lot of good things about it too.

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Actually.. that's the one that's a bunch of skits stuck together!

Watch Holy Grail first.. Then... Once you've managed to stop laughing... Watch Life of Brian (THE best one IMO), and prepare to be unable to do anything sensible for a couple of days!

Oh, and keep an eye on the GGOOC channel... It quite often degenerates into Python skits...

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Quote of the day: "I'm a natural red head, I'm just a magical blonde."


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QUOTE OF THE CENTURY: "You can get to sleep with a blonde, but a redhead will keep you up all night."

Jess got a demotion.


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You'll have to ask Eloise Smith about that...



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She's not saying anything!