Working right now. Will try to have at least a page of his story up this week.
Static and Son
woohoo!!! Can't wait!
Looking forward to it
I just went over everything in this thread, and I have to say that all doubts I may have had about the CoX community are long gone.
The folks here have done an amazing job with the characters, and I want to put it out there that Rox, Daven, Celtic, and Gill have made me want to pick up animating again. Thank you!
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I just went over everything in this thread, and I have to say that all doubts I may have had about the CoX community are long gone.
The folks here have done an amazing job with the characters, and I want to put it out there that Rox, Daven, Celtic, and Gill have made me want to pick up animating again. Thank you!
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Wait.....you made yourself wanna animate. LOL I'm so confused. 
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I just went over everything in this thread, and I have to say that all doubts I may have had about the CoX community are long gone.
The folks here have done an amazing job with the characters, and I want to put it out there that Rox, Daven, Celtic, and Gill have made me want to pick up animating again. Thank you!
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Wait.....you made yourself wanna animate. LOL I'm so confused.
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I guess I should've said Celtic Bolt. 
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I just went over everything in this thread, and I have to say that all doubts I may have had about the CoX community are long gone.
The folks here have done an amazing job with the characters, and I want to put it out there that Rox, Daven, Celtic, and Gill have made me want to pick up animating again. Thank you!
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Wait.....you made yourself wanna animate. LOL I'm so confused.
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I guess I should've said Celtic Bolt.
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doesn't take much to confuse a rock ya know! 
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doesn't take much to confuse a rock ya know!
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Yeah that's tr......HEY!!!! 
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doesn't take much to confuse a rock ya know!
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Yeah that's tr......HEY!!!!
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haha pwned.
Hurry static! I can't wait to see the finished product!!!
*holds breath*
*and btw I agree with you Blarg, and I apreciate the apology allycat. 14 here. Most of the time I just let that kinda thing brush off. You just gota take no offence to it. 
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Yeah that's tr......HEY!!!!
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Okay right now I'm crying from laughing so hard at this exchange....No morning cuppa jo for me. 
OK. Here we go. A little bit of the story. It is still being typed (possibly edited for grammer). But here is a uncut beginning. The rest will be coming. Should I do it as a link or just typed in this?
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X-Force Life
1. Ice.E 2. Spike 3. Speed 4. Stretch 5. Flame 6. Shape 7. Strength 8. Tackle 9. Fangs
10. W.W 11. Spark 12. Smart Guy
Those are the name of the legendary heroes!
Tyler said 5 up! He turned into Flame! He busted into the burning apartment. He came out of the apartment with 30 fainted adults and 5 kids fainted as well. He ran over to his cousin Stevie and his grandpa Pa. They said look over at the town aquarium. Another incident? 3 up! He raced to the town aquarium. He shot through the aquarium doors! 10 up! He told everyone to get behind him and then he absorbed the water then he told everyone to get out of the aquarium. Just when the last person came out a giant wave roared over W.W but lucky him he absorbed the wave. Stevie and Pa came running to Tyler. How about you take a break at the art museum? Tyler loved art. When he got to the art museum the police were there Trouble thought Tyler. 3 up! He bulleted through the police. Once he was in the museum he said 6 up! He turned into Shape so he could turn into a painting. He tried to find his favorite painting by Leonardo De Vinci, but he couldnt find it. Stolen growled Tyler. He remembered the painting and turned into the painting! Since he was a painting he could not move. He heard footsteps approaching. He felt himself get picked up and thrown in a bag. He also heard a voice say Thats the last of em.
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Please be nice with any initial critiques (I wouldn't expect anything else from this community) and remember this is from the mind of an 8 year old.
Static and Son
Sounds like a great start to the story, Love the ability to just say the number and instantly switch into the characters. Looking forward to the adventures of Tyler
Not a bad start. There are of course a couple grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors but this is to be expected.
The only problem i have with it is that it sounds like he's going from being a hero to a painting thief. Did he just want to go into the museum after hours and check out a painting he liked (hence his reason for shapeshifting)? There's no really clear transition between the scenes and makes for a confusing read.
Minor flaws aside, it's good work! Keep it up!
-D
My DeviantArt
Extraplanar 50 Mind/Kin
Argos the Beast 50 Stone/Stone
Everblaze 50 Fire/SS
Falcon's Fury 50 Kat/Inv
Heirloom 50 BS/DA
quote: When he got to the art museum the police were there Trouble thought Tyler
That was his reason.
Now that this is typed I will be working with him to put it together. I think I will -push- the comic book style as he has done very short scenes.
I have downloaded the Comic Book Creator and am working on some city screen shots in CoH now. We have made him a toon called the 'Kid' and are trying to get all the images.
I think I will start with some basic 6 box comic pages and add content as we find it.
With this being the intro issue I think you will see all the characters and some of their enemies.
Keep the comments coming please.
Ah okay i see now. I was in a slight hurry when i read it, so i'm not suprised i missed something. I've also been having trouble reading lately... I can't seem to focus on what it is and i often lose my place between lines.
Sorry about that Static!
-D
My DeviantArt
Extraplanar 50 Mind/Kin
Argos the Beast 50 Stone/Stone
Everblaze 50 Fire/SS
Falcon's Fury 50 Kat/Inv
Heirloom 50 BS/DA
X-Force Life
1. Ice.E 2. Spike 3. Speed 4. Stretch 5. Flame 6. Shape 7. Strength 8. Tackle
9. Fangs 10. W.W 11. Spark 12. Smart Guy
Those are the name of the legendary heroes!
Tyler said 5 up! He turned into Flame! He busted into the burning apartment. He came out of the apartment with 30 fainted adults and 5 kids fainted as well. He ran over to his cousin Stevie and his grandpa Pa. They said look over at the town aquarium. Another incident? 3 up! He raced to the town aquarium. He shot through the aquarium doors! 10 up! He told everyone to get behind him and then he absorbed the water then he told everyone to get out of the aquarium. Just when the last person came out a giant wave roared over W.W but lucky him he absorbed the wave. Stevie and Pa came running to Tyler. How about you take a break at the art museum? Tyler loved art. When he got to the art museum the police were there Trouble thought Tyler. 3 up! He bulleted through the police. Once he was in the museum he said 6 up! He turned into Shape so he could turn into a painting. He tried to find his favorite painting by Leonardo De Vinci, but he couldnt find it. Stolen growled Tyler. He remembered the painting and turned into the painting! Since he was a painting he could not move. He heard footsteps approaching. He felt himself get picked up and thrown in a bag. He also heard a voice say Thats the last of em. Next thing you know youre at their hideout. You get thrown with the other paintings carelessly. Tyler said 7 up! And went through the whole hideout and knocked everyone out. After that he returned to where all the paintings were and said 3 up! He pushed all the paintings carefully 1 by 1 back to the correct place in the museum. After that he walked home to have a good nights sleep. When he woke up Stevie was above him yelling Jewelry robbery! Tyler jumped up and yelled 1 up! He ran out of the house and then ran to the jewelry shop. Once he was in he did a mega-ice blast. He found the crook and said 5 up! He blasted a fire-ball at his bag, opened it up and got the jewelry. He put it in a frozen cops hand then ran back home. The next day Stevie told Tyler to check out the power plant because something is wrong with the town electricity. 11 up! said Tyler. Since he was electricity it was easy to teleport from place to place as long as there is electricity. Just then he teleported from the house to the town power plant. He looked around Lectrick growled Spark. Lectrick is Sparks arch enemy. Just then he heard some cackling and around the corridor. Lectrick thought Spark. 7 up! whispered Tyler. He tip toed over to where he heard the cackling and blew a punch at that very spot. He hit Lectrick. BOOM! Lectrick crashed to the back of the store. Ahhhhhh yelled Lectrick! Strength ran to Lectrick and gave him a super-punch right in his stomach. Lectrick fell to the floor, 3 up! said Tyler. He went as fast as he could to try to get to the police before Lectrick woke up. As soon as he got there he turned into Tyler and said Lectrick is at the power plant. The police thanked him and then they hurried to the power plant. I better follow them just in case thought Tyler. But half of him said not to follow them. Ill let a superhero settle this said Tyler. 12 up! said Tyler. Smart Guy will think this through said Tyler. Smart Guy thought and thought and finally decided to follow them. 11 up! said Tyler and then he teleported to the power plant. 3 up! said Tyler and since he is super fast he can listen very closely. He listened and listened but didnt hear anything. As he was leaving he heard someone say Youll never get me! Since he heard that he said 4 up!. he opened the door and closed it. Lectrick sprang up. Uh oh said Letrick. Stretch stretched his arm out and wrapped it around Lectrick. Ha, ha said Lectrick. You forgot I can electricity you. Nope said Stretch. Watch me said Lectrick. Just then he blasted electricity at Stretch. Im made of rubber which doesnt conduct electricity, remember? Double uh oh said Lectrick. Stretch pulled him toward himself. When he was in front of him, he said 11 up! and teleported into a police cell. Bye, bye said Spark. Noooooo yelled Lectrick. As soon as he got home Pa said The zoo, the zoo! 3 up! said Tyler. He bolted to the zoo. 8 up! said Tyler. He ambled cautiously through the zoo. He heard a movement behind him. Ahhhhh yelled Tackle as he flew through the air. What hit me? said Tackle in a dazed tone. I did said a voice that seemed very far away. He looked behind him. Trollo said Tackle. Yep he said. I used my Rhino. Rhino? Tackle said in a questioning tone. Im taking over the breed rhinos and walruses. Tyler thought he would want to control Tackle and Fangs as well. Just then he tackled Trollo. Ahhhh he yelled as he got thrown across the room. Nows my chance to escape Tackle thought. 3 up! Tyler said. He raced around the whole building and finally found an exit. When he came out of the skyscraper he was at the zoo! Strange said Tyler. Arff, arff someone said. Uh oh said Tyler. He quickly went to his right then to his left and said 3 up! He raced in circles around the thing that said Arff, arff. When Speed stopped he found that it was a walrus. It looked dead. Tyler said 8 up! he poked the walrus.
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Please be kind and keep in mind, an 8 year old wrote this.
All comments will be helpful.
Thanks
Static & Son
Ok. Where are the critiques? School is almost out and he needs a summer project to keep himself busy.
Static & Son
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The story is interesting, since he can just say the number and become whatever he wants.
My only suggestion is that it helps when posting a story to break up things into paragraphs. Also if anyone is speaking that needs it's own line by itself.
For example:
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Superguy went to the market after a day of fighting crime. He pushed his cart down the dairy isle and as he turned the corner he found an empty space where the eggs used to be. The store manager stood in front of the emtpy space with a worried look on his face.
"Wow no eggs! What happened?" He asked.
"Well Superguy..." The store manager explained, "all the eggsin the city have been stolen by the Evil ChickenMan"
"Evil ChickenMan?! I must stop him!"
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Anyway stuff like that just makes it easy for people to read and know when someone is talking.
OK. So having a problem launching the Comic Book Creator. I had to copy the folders from the old hard drive after the major meltdown and now the application file won't launch. Any suggestions?
OK. Got the install codes resent to me. We are working on it now. Anyone have tips? And also how do you post a completed comic to the forums?
Well, I would say just scan the image and upload it to photobucket.com or somthing. Then just give us the links.
Still working on this. The cover is kinda of what he wanted. Still needs to be tweaked a little.
Kids Comic Book Cover
Also he is an image of his kid that he made on CoH. So we could get some city shots.
Tyler - Kid from Comic Book
Back on topic:
Any word yet on how things are going?
Back after 18 months away!