mistformsquirrel

Since some time ago I was informed this is in fact, the correct area for fan-fiction despite not seeing much of it...

I decided to create a fun thread for CoH writers and for people to comment!

So... here's the idea:

We'll start out sharing *one* character bio each!

You *MUST* exceed what the character bio limit in-game would be in length. Thus - you can get more creative with your language! That is, in fact part of the goal for this; at least for now. Give your favorite character's bio - but do so in detail rather than skimming things over. Feel free to do it in installments rather than all at once (in fact it'd be easier to critique that way!)

Oh - and a last thing - Comments and Critiques are welcome as with most threads in this section of the forums - but I request that people not quote the entire thing. The reason of course is so we don't end up with ginormous huge "Oh em eff gee thats alot of text" quotes all over <'x'> So... when critiquing, quote the section you're referencing and go with that. As always, be polite and nice to eachother, anyone at all is welcome, and that means we've got people of all sorts of varying abilities - pull out all the stops in your own work, but leave others room to learn!

Btw - I do know there's a website for this kind of stuff: But for now, I want this to be as much a writing exercise as actually compiling stories; so anyways...

I figure its only right if I start.

<Squirrel grabs thick cloth covered book and plops it on the podium, pulling up a barstool 10 times his height so he can reach>


Yumii dashed down the hard wood stairs, a half-zipped backpack filled with books slung over one shoulder and a piece of toast clenched between her teeth. She burst out the front door, nearly tripping over herself, finally regaining her balance against a tree while shifting the bag to both shoulders.

Yumii was late for class. Again. The fourth time in half as many weeks. It wasn't so much laziness that made every morning an exciting dash to Paragon High - Yumii is just terminally tardy. Something always managed to go wrong - this morning it had been the alarm, she'd forgotten to turn it on.

Ten blocks to go and the toast was down, the dry crumbs doing their best to stick in her throat. There'd been no time for butter. Nine blocks and she slipped on, of all things, someone's leftover banana peel. This is getting ridiculous.

Standing up as quickly as she could manage she continued hobbling on, running into an alley that would cut across half of King's Row; this shortcut had often been the only thing between a close call and yet another tardy slip. Only today, as her sneaker touched down on the concrete of the alley... it stuck. She tried to pick her foot up and couldn't. Chewing gum probably. Gah, freakin' litterbugs! Gotta hurry.

She bent over to pry up the sticky wintergreen mess when she realized that the bottom of her shoe wasn't stuck to the ground by malicious bubblegum. Rather it was frozen, a thin, but extremely sturdy layer of ice directly beneath the sole of her foot held the sneaker in place and would not budge.

Before being able to think much on this unusual turn of events, an intense burning pain shot through her mind and the diminuative catgirl slumped to the pavement, unconcious.

From the alley, two sinister figures in heavy brown robes, laden with sigils, and each carrying a hefty crossbow inscribed with potent runes of capture.

(To be continued...)

I think your *base* premise is decent - I like the Egyptian hat and turquise color lightning eyes.

I think the problem is - you did *exactly* the most obvious thing >.< Which is to use the Circuit pattern and wrapped gloves with said egyptian hat.

Personally, the way I see this improving drastically would be to continue the circuitry theme throughout the entire body...

Then put a mystic symbol across the chest in a similar color (to break up the lines).

I wish there were elbow/knee things, because that would also help vastly; but they just aren't an option >.< But yeah - keep your egyptian hat, keep your circuits... lose the wraps.

That of course, is merely my opinion <,< and you're free to do with it as you wish!

Graver pwns the universe >.>;





What? >.> He does <,<m

That's great Zobragas! <,< lol "Coffee Time - My Time!"

>.> lol

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Hmmm, hope I didn't post here before.

Actually, back in Asheron's Call days everyone seemed to be making avatars (we didn't have toons back then, ya'know) that looked more or less like themselves. And so we had a world full of white guys for the most part. I got sick of that fast and made my opposite. Male -> Female, White -> Black, Hairy -> Bald. And thus Tesslah was born (then translated to CoH). Been a great character and I don't think I've seen anyone looking like her in any game.

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That's a really cool look Zloth! <@_@>

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But...but... Tesslah is my opposite. If Tesslah looks cool then that means I don't!?

Cuuuppaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa! Squirrel is being mean to meeeeeee!!!

P.S. Thanks!

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You're male. Male + Cool = Doesn't mix.

(JK JK JK JK <^.~&gt

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But but... I need clothes! Icon is closed!

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lol awww



all 4 of em?

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Of course >.> they're closed for a Fashionista holiday - the feast of St. Gucci <,<

I really like your camo Scrapper <^_^> You didn't do all that bad for someone just starting! <^,^> its all about practice! Practice practice nerve-grating practice!

Copyright wise...

You cannot copyright a name.

You could make "Wolverine" as long as the character is *ALOT* different than the X-men character.

That said - trademarks might be another story - I don't know so very much about them. But copyrightwise you should be completely and utterly safe; especially from obscure and minor characters.

Dank you.

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Arguing about what an origin means is just silly.

Excersize in semantics. Natural, Science, Mutation, Technology...they are all related. Science is the study of nature. Mutation occurs Naturally but can be caused or accelerated by Science and or Technology. A Naturally occuring radiation could trigger a Mutation. Too many chest X-Rays could cause a Mutation. For that matter a time traveling gnome could cause a mutation by casting a magic spell. Ha! Perhaps the "magic" was just technology to advanced for our simple understanding?

Telling someone their origin is wrong is even more hypocritical for the artistic portion of our CoX community.

You there! The language you used to describe your artistic ideas is all wrong! How dare you use that particular medium! That is wrong!

For shame, I say! You have your ideas of what a particular origin label means. Great! Depending on how you frame the question you may very well be correct. But that doesn't mean it is the only way to frame the question.

The argument is silly...my response may be silly because it is the middle of the night and I can't sleep.

=^_^=

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*nods assent*

*sneezes on thread* <x.x> I got a code in by doze. Sobby.

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I was thinking of starting to post art too...Y'know, to represent the 12-year-olds of the CoH community.

Spookie: I really like your drawing so far and I can't wait to see the finished product! Welcome to the Fan Art Boards!!!

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Feel free too! <^,^> There is no such thing as "too young to post art"; the best part is this forum is *ridiculously* helpful!

You shoulda seen my art before I started posting here... I've improved alot (even though I have a *LONG* way to go yet!)

Pirate: The main thing I notice with your unfinished pic - the torso seems kinda masculine, with little balloon boobs on it >.< Which is a *very* easy mistake to make!

Basically, imho, the shoulders are a tad too wide, and the torso may even be slightly too long - also the breasts seem slightly off... think of them as overturned teacups (I think thats the way it was described to me once >.&gt (What? I'm not obssessed with breasts! Not at all! Nuh uh. No how... <gets smacked with a giant mallet from behind> <x.x> ow...)

On the other hand, I like the way you have the hair laid out, and the skirt looks pretty decent! <^-^> I also like your legs and boots - feminine; but not "omg I'm a model and hot and stuff".

That of course is all in this squirrels opinion <,< so only trust it as far as you want!

I'd hug ya TA <;.;> But me? I is sick right now *sneezes on Graver* scuse me <x.x>;

That really sucks though man >.<

Big difference there though - Paragon City is a PLACE; *YOU* are a Person.

You play in Paragon - but who you are is more individual. That's the big thing with CoX is that we get to be whatever we want - that's why we have costume options like we do; why we can select any power, why we can do pretty much anything - because basically CoX is the closest you can come to taking a pen and paper, drawing out a character, and then actually doing something with that character in a game.

But anyways, thats' all I'll say too.

The origin only means that if you make it mean that. /sigh

Lemee splain why I'm so focused on this - in the end, the origins don't mean much - and frankly they should be changed so you can type a short blurb about yourself instead. Why? Because this kind of silliness happens!

When it comes down to it - the reason I say "as long as you can explain it..." is because this is an RPG, and I've played pen and paper RPGs for some time now (close to a decade); that means that to me, in particular as a GM/DM, I want to know how *you* see you. It only starts to matter if there's a real mechanical reason. As is though, its just an RP tool and should be treated as such.

Also, I'm something of a writer - not a *good* writer; but I do write stories; and that makes me desire a broad canvas. Attempting to narrow it without a *real* good (namely, mechanical) reason, isn't going to do anyone any good. And again - its merely an RP tool, so why be so limiting? Remember - its not everyone else's view of you - its YOUR view of you.

Yeah, technically its your hero ID, so maybe they have some in-game litmus test. But until they do - it doesn't work that way. They can't possibly include every sub-possibility in those little paragraphs now can they?

Finally - Ever notice the Mutation DOs? The ones that state you've been given a genetic therapy or treatment? Yeah... They're Mutant/Science - and there's a reason for that. You can make a mutant via science.

Mutant - by its nature, is simply something altered from its original form. *Why* its a mutant is less important than that it *is* a Mutant. You can call yourself Sci or Mutant - it really doesn't even matter; its just how you want to view the character.

As for Nictus - I suspect nicti undergo some sort of treatment after going evil. That's why there are evil "peacebringers" who are still normal kheldians, and there are also warshades, which have nictus powers - and those powers don't change even though they changed sides.

So I suspect Nictus may breed as normal kheldians still (however kheldians do so).

I haven't finished the kheldian arcs though - so all of the above is just speculation.

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PMD and Foo, the two Thes, are correct. There are a great many things you could call a "mutation," but the Mutation origin refers to just being born a freak.

Internal, genetic circumstances make you Mutation. External agents along more (relatively speaking) mundane lines, like too much of the wrong kind of sun on a Tuesday, make you Science. Mystical energies and spells can change you as well, but that makes you Magic. Government-created nanorobot infection altered your cellular structure? Technology.

(Lost are Science by the way, just like Rikti and Nictus.)

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<o.O> They keep dropping Mutation enhancers when I fight em.

Rikti actually seem to be Tech mostly imho - I mean they have guns and armor for 90% of their powers; yeah, they have psionics, but their psionics would be "natural" for them

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I know Rikti are originally human - but Rikti from their home world could well have been mutated to this form so long that this is their "natural" state. I've not read anywhere in game otherwise.

Remember - the origins are broad and vague - if you can explain it - it works.

I really like that! <^.^> I'm sure TA will too!

I will suggest one thing though - TA uses the "Hood" rather than Low Hood or in this case Thieves Hood.

Still - Excellent picture! <^,^> rawr!

<. .> We shall see more right? <,<

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And monkey should post! <,<;

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Alright fine!

This is Brandy Iron and this is me


I look more like this --> actually...if my skin was yellow instead of brown


(Monkey is crafty)

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<^,^> <bounces on monkies head> <^.^> Rawrrrrr coot!

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Hmmm, hope I didn't post here before.

Actually, back in Asheron's Call days everyone seemed to be making avatars (we didn't have toons back then, ya'know) that looked more or less like themselves. And so we had a world full of white guys for the most part. I got sick of that fast and made my opposite. Male -> Female, White -> Black, Hairy -> Bald. And thus Tesslah was born (then translated to CoH). Been a great character and I don't think I've seen anyone looking like her in any game.

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That's a really cool look Zloth! <@_@>

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Okay good news first, here's the sketch, I plan on the background being very dark so the flames and the glow will be a big effect. Here's the bad news... I'm posting all the color work from now on, on Deviant, which is down at the moment. So by and when I finish this, and you seeing it, is up to them...

Hope you like it.

LJ

(my wife likes this one the best, and I'm hoping to making it work from what I picture in my head, but if anyone wants a crack at coloring it before me, feel free. See this is what happens when I take the time to draw off my rinkydink 4 x 5 tablet and on real paper first... bad LJ bad... gotta stop being lazy)

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This is looking *REALLY* good LJ... I like the posing; and as someone else said the POWER. Very cool!

Damn... now you're making me want to make a hellion in-game... I see plenty of Skulls themed chars...

... Oo... <o.o> I just had a funny as heck idea <,<

<. .>

I would like to take this time to /em drool. Thank you for your patience.

Are you kidding? Cats have egos the size of blimps.

The cats line of thinking "Pfft... I let him go."

<,< What?

Those were great lol >-<; The last one was like "... LOL!"

For a second - I honestly thought I'd hear Sir Mixalot pipe in lol <,<;

Oh - and the best part imho - the colorshifting >< Impressive!

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HA! I loved that!

From the subject heading I thought of this tho.

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I may have to make those into avatars now... <o.o>;

Its as if the goofy rodent half of my personality just beat the fuzzy cat part of my personality in a staring contest <o.@> I feel weird