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Quote:Thought I had put in the description (40+recommended), apologies on that. However, I've had other critiques who enjoyed the Film Noir homage with the black & white mobs. And as fans of the movie The Maltese Falcon, were able to follow the plot twists. To each his or her own.Originally Posted by Venture_NA
Arc #207827, "The Maltese Bird of Prey"
tl;dr: 1 star. Offenses: overpowered mobs, pastiche too obvious
This is a poorly-written copy of a classic novel implemented with boring, unfun custom mobs. Skip it. -
does it come with a side of slaw?
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Arc Name: The Maltese Bird of Prey
Arc ID: 207827
Faction: Neutral
Diff Level: 37-50
Playtime: 30-60 mins
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A film noir tale of treachery, deceit and a prized object d'art. Assist a grizzled and overworked PI, by the name of Sam Diamond as he unravels a convoluted web spun by the Fat Man and his co-horts.
Custom mobs, bosses and a particularly large EB stand in your way of solving the crime and finding the goods before the bad guys can.
Arc Name: Raiders of the Lost Party Hats
Arc ID: 85221
Length: Medium (2 mish's)
Morality: Heroic
Diff Level: 37-50
Playtime: 30-60 mins
Zaftique was supposed to be on security detail- but somehow the Freakshow got past her and raided our stash of unmentionables. It will be your mission to recover them before they can be used for evil purposes. -
Bumped, for announcing i15 compliance.
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Looking forward to the punditry.
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Arc Name: The Maltese Bird of Prey
Arc ID: 207827
Faction: Neutral
Diff Level: 37-50
Playtime: 30-60 mins
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tl;dr: 3 stars.
Pros: A solid arc; short, to the point missions; great costumes; good atmosphere.
Cons: Multiple typos; minor plot holes; dialog needs some work.
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Thank you for the review, and its just the kind of critique I've been seeking, especially the grammar and misspelling catches. As for dialogue or plot holes, that comes from the translation I did of the the source material and a desire to keep true to it. (i.e. The characters always met in nice hotels or offices, so I never considered using one of the Abandoned maps.)
That said, even if you've never seen the movie or read the book- you should still be able to play the Arc and understand the story as presented. So I'll definitely address those issues for the uninitiated. -
Truth in Paragon
-will be happy to give it another go when it's fully finished
With mine- I assume that the player has some knowledge of the movie. Therefore, you'd be actually looking for 2 dead bodies. -
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I'll give it another run-through. I hope I didn't come across as overly negative in my review, because there was a lot of promise in it.
And I really liked the Freak EB you made.
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Took it in the vain that you intended, especially since it was my first go at the MA. The humor was to come from the NPC quips, so I'm glad you picked up on that. (btw, the other MA in my sig is geared towards fans of film noir.) -
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Arc Name: Truth in Paragon
Arc ID: 216693
Faction: Heroic
Creator Global/Forum Name: @Draconek (Forum Name: jdinflames)
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Was able to solo with my 50 Warshade. CoT mobs are overused in the actual game, imo- so perhaps make up custom mobs to go with the bosses. First boss was a good challenge for the WS, but did the second have the same name, inspite of what the Intro said? A little more backstory in the mish intro's and I think you'll have a good MA here.
My MA for consideration:
Arc Name: The Maltese Bird of Prey
Arc ID: 207827
Faction: Neutral
Diff Level: 37-50
Playtime: 30-60 mins
A film noir tale of treachery, deceit and a prized object d'art. Custom critters, bosses and one particularly large EB. -
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I ran your arc and though solid play wise I felt the humor was much more suited for a male audience. So, I am using a life line and calling in a guest reviewer, Hellguard.
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Totally understand your position, the idea came from ongoing in-jokes we have in the Angry Angel SG. The EB of Mish 1 is a new invention, otherwise the custom toons are based on members of the SG. That said ty to you and Hellguard for you critques and I did expand the intro dialogs to give it more backstory. -
what's brown and sounds like a bell?
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Fun trip back to the 70s. Kept having flashbacks to my jr. high days.
In trade, I offer up:
Title: Raiders of the Lost Party Hats
Arc ID: 85221
Creators Global Name: Zafft
Mission Count: 2
Notes run solo or a team with defense against Psi and Dark damage. -
A film noir tale of treachery, deceit and a prized object d'art. Assist a grizzled and overworked PI, by the name of Sam Diamond as he unravels a convoluted web spun by the Fat Man and his co-horts.
Custom mobs, bosses and a particularly large EB stand in your way of solving the crime and finding the goods before the bad guys can.
Arc Name: The Maltese Bird of Prey
Arc ID: 207827
Faction: Neutral
Diff Level: 37-50
Playtime: 30-60 mins
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Where's their twin sisters- Tramp and Trollop?
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Arc Name: The Maltese Bird of Prey
Arc ID: 207827
Faction: Neutral
Diff Level: All levels
Playtime: 30-60 mins
A film noir tale of treachery, deceit and a prized object d'art. Custom critters, bosses and one particularly large EB. -
perhaps your team size or diff rating?
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Gratz to the winners
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Jane Kalmes aka Grammar Girl.
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Really need to get Grammar Girl as a signature character in the game.
In fact, she needs a task force, in which you can round up dangling modifiers and enforce subject-verb agreement.
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But she's get generic-ized for copyright infringemnet: http://grammar.quickanddirtytips.com/default.aspx
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Happy Happy, Joy Joy!
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Saw too many movies.