Devin and Trinkit - by Juggertha
By
Celestius,
Posted on: 2006-08-17 01:59 in Multi-Media Fan Creations
Hrmm... there's alot of good points to this piece Juggy >.< But there are a couple things... bugging me.
First - I love Devin's upper torso (I'm assuming he's the male >.>
; very nicely done. His waist seems innordinately thin. That however could be a legitimate stylistic decision - it doesn't look bad; but I do notice he seems... pinched! Still, not a huge thing and like I said <@_@> it may just be a stylistic choice; in which case disregard this bit.
His forearms and hands are what really gets me though >.>
I'm not sure how to describe the forearm thing... its kinda like the muscle on the forearm is going up into the elbow a little >.< Err... I dunno; its hard to word it.
The hands though I can explain
Actually holy crap... I figured out what's off...
The arm on the right side (His left arm) - its a little too short. Notice how the right arm is further down? The elbow joint isn't long enough I think >.< Keep in mind, I'm much less talented so I'm just going by what I see <,< if someone else has a better way to explain it, listen to them.
The hands - well, the left hand, it feels a tad flat. Its not a huge thing; but I notice it.
Otherwise Devin looks pretty good.
Trinket... hrm...
Well, I have a couple issues with her; keepin in mind, I'm a total amateur here so I'm just doing what I see <,<
First - Her face looks crooked to me... like she got punched real hard and her head deformed a bit >.> I thought at first it was just her cocking her head, but looking closer...
The other big one... her breasts seem too low to me, either that or her torso is too long >.< I'm not sure which it is. My anatomy isn't the best though; so I'm just eyeballing it.
>.> I hope that helps. I think its a pretty darn good piece overall though man <^-^> I think if you touch up a few things; and put the final spit and polish on it it'll be great!
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I gotta agree with Squirrels, the head on Trinket is kinda squished. Looks kind of like a painting from Salvador Dali Other than that nothing really stands out to me.
hehe... ok, nowyou're just being mean!!
Joke, I'm actually still working on the pic now. Thanks for the thoughts guys.
=)
I like the progress!
Trinkit's face, looks a little too angry I think. and I'll agree with the others, kinda squished. It makes her look much older than Devin, almost elderly... but you are at 50% and I understand that.
Her pants could be a lighter color of kakhi to match her outfit in the source material...
the stuff others have pointed out about Devin don't bother me as much... but you can definately make those fixes they listed
thanks for taking on the work!
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Ok, looking at it again, and working on it, here are some of the changes I did
-changed the forward arm, gave it more detail to bring it into focus. The problem is not that it is too short, but rather the other one is too long. Thinking about how to fix that.
-More details inteh foreground. I felt it needed more to pull the entire area away from the background.
-Shrunk her face a bit. I had to re-do a lot and it still doesn't look 100%. That'll teach me for not looking mroe carefully at my initial lines. It looked like that in the sketch and I thought it had a cool angle, instead, it became a bit of a problem.
-I'm still planning on doing a few more touch ups and if anyone has suggestions on that back arm, I'm all ears.
I think I figured out what is making Trinkit look like she is much older... I believe her chin might be a tad too promenant... tightening that up a bit may bring her age back to around mid to late 20's like she is.
I appreciate the hard work!
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Fixed the chin AND the gun.
WOOT.
(juggy I sent you a note on DA!)
Ooo that's looking supa cool! I really like the way these two look in-game too, but I gotta say that Trinkit is my fave (which is why I just finished her chibi ).
So I say unto you, "Neat!"
Go forth and finish so that we may gaze upon its splendor.
.....Maybe I should wait for the coffee to wear off before posting. XD
Looking good so far, Juggy. Definitely like the glow effect you have on the guns.
You da man!
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Trinkit is my fave (which is why I just finished her chibi ).
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Woot Trinkit got a CHIBI!!!!
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Thanks very much Juggertha!
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Can't wait to see this finished Juggy <^-^>b Rawr >,<
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Aye, give me one more day and it'll be done.
Juggy works fast!
Aye, when my wife is out of town
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Thats illegal in some states Juggy!
Haha... but I don't live IN the States
FYI, this pic is now finished. I'm happy with it overall, but that doesn't mean that it's perfect... hehehehe
(is it ever really finished?)
Never >.> You just get to a point you have to put it down! <T_T>
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Well, this is my third piece this month (I think) and I want to appologize to Cuppa_Bubble for taking so long.
This is a 90% finished version, so it's not quite done yet. I'm posting it here to get any last minute feedback on it.
So, what do you all think of Devin and Trinkit ?