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Vincent looks up at Lukeryo over the top of his spectacles, and speaks:

"I don't have powers"

...before going back to reading his sheet music.

Vincent continued to sit in the corner, silent, reading through a collection of sheet-music. He looked up as the other student in the room muttered a word, pushed his spectacles back onto the bridge of his nose, and continued reading.

Vincent looks up and slams the violin-case shut, fastens the latches, picks it up, and goes to sit down on a chair in the furthest corner of the room.

Vincent carried on walking through the school, seemingly ignoring a loud crash from down the corridor, followed by a large wail.

He eventually arrived at his destination, the music room, and peered through the window on the door. Nobody appeared to be about yet. He checked the handle, and the door swung open.

Closing the door behind him, Vincent set up a musical stand, placed his black carry-case on a tabletop, and unclasped the lid, to reveal a pristine Stradivari violin.

"Come on Vincent, you're going to be late."

The words were barely comprehended by Vincent as he came out of a moment of deep thought. The 4x4 he was in parked up at the side of the kerb next to the school, and he clambered out of the door.

Vincent went to the rear doors, opened them, and pulled out a large black case, and a shoulder-bag which he donned, before closing the door, and walking towards the school without saying a word.

"Goodbye honey" came a voice after him. Vincent pushed his thick-rimmed spectacles back onto the bridge of his nose with one finger, and checked that his centre-parted black hair was still in shape, before heading into the main door of the school.

((OOC: Happy Birthday Pious))

Point to note: You could use the first-person view for 'realistic' camera shots.

Yep, a definite improvement on the original. Always remember, violence doesn't have to be extreme to have an effect on the reader.

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Excellent work, maybe you should get together with one of the artists on the forum and have a Shimmery comic?

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Ask, and ye shall have the amazingness of the Shimmery Comic:

Adapted From The Last Excerpt

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lol, nice one, altho im not too sure on the representation of Devidose there... O.o

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Lol

Yeah... Devi was a little 'jolly' there (And he and Shimmery are both 5'8)

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no, in RL we're that height, Devi is 6' 6", the standard height for my male toons, altho given the alts i have being one or another form OF Devi, they kinda have to be the same height

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You said Devi was 5'8 in the 'Compare yourself to your Hero' thread

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woops

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I'll be sure to make Devi somewhere between 5'8" and 6'6" next time...whatever that is in MS Paint pixels.

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Excellent work, maybe you should get together with one of the artists on the forum and have a Shimmery comic?

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Ask, and ye shall have the amazingness of the Shimmery Comic:

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It's good, a couple of grammatical errors, but really nothing serious to 'break' the story. I'm not sure about Paragon Protectors being kids/teenagers, but then again, I suppose Crey would use them as well. I have always thought of PP's as being rather silent, authoritive types too, rather than the type to make crude jokes, but that's just me.

Also, if the stories are posted in Creative, you are likely to get more feedback from others, as not everyone who reads the Creative Section bothers with our little Roleplaying section.

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Windmaker, nothing that i said was in anyway over the top, it was the truth.maybe there were some mistakes in his story but so what..Why comment on every little mistake?

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So that he can correct the mistakes, and go to write even better pieces of fiction?

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And, to be really honest, most of England outside the South East would rather be referred to by county name.

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Some of us Southern pansies actually do our best to say people are from a certain area, rather than just say "England" or "Scotland"

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my favorite was

Blaster"hey can u rez me plz"
Me"sorry i can't im a trick arrow defender..."
Blaster"i don't understand y u can't rez me!"
Me"dude what would u like me to do shoot arrows in ur [censored] till u come back to life?"

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That my friend, is a true classic.

Nah, I think the last word will be 'wizzards'

Wonka was asking the question to Red_Saint, not to Britanic, as he was referring to Ravenswing's post. (Whom we shorten to Birdy at times)

A slightly amended table:

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Name: Mind Sweeper
Level: 50
Archetype: Defender
Primary: Kinetics
Secondary: Psychic Blast
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01) --> Transfusion==> Acc(1) Acc(3) Rechg(3) Heal(5) Heal(5) Heal(7)
01) --> Mental Blast==> Dmg(1)
02) --> Siphon Power==> Acc(2) Acc(9) Rechg(9) Rechg(11) Rechg(11)
04) --> Subdue==> Acc(4) Dmg(7) Dmg(13)
06) --> Siphon Speed==> Acc(6) Acc(13) Rechg(15) Rechg(15) Rechg(19)
08) --> Increase Density==> DmgRes(8)
10) --> Hover==> Fly(10) Fly(17) Fly(17)
12) --> Speed Boost==> EndMod(12)
14) --> Psionic Lance==> Rechg(14) Dmg(27) Dmg(29) Dmg(29) Rechg(43)
16) --> Telekinetic Blast==> Acc(16) Acc(19) Dmg(21) Dmg(23) Dmg(25) Rechg(34)
18) --> Inertial Reduction==> Jump(18)
20) --> Will Domination==> Acc(20) Acc(21) Dmg(23) Dmg(25) Dmg(36) Rechg(42)
22) --> Assault==> EndRdx(22)
24) --> Tactics==> EndRdx(24) TH_Buf(27) TH_Buf(31) TH_Buf(43)
26) --> Transference==> Acc(26) Acc(31) Rechg(33) Rechg(33) EndMod(33) EndMod(48)
28) --> Psychic Scream==> Acc(28) Dmg(34) Dmg(34) Rechg(42)
30) --> Hasten==> Rechg(30) Rechg(31) Rechg(40)
32) --> Fulcrum Shift==> Acc(32) Acc(36) Acc(37) Rechg(37) Rechg(37) Rechg(45)
35) --> Stealth==> EndRdx(35) EndRdx(36) EndRdx(42)
38) --> Psychic Wail==> Acc(38) Acc(39) Dmg(39) Dmg(39) Rechg(40) Rechg(40)
41) --> Vengeance==> DefBuf(41) DefBuf(43) DefBuf(45) TH_Buf(46)
44) --> Mass Hypnosis==> Acc(44) Rechg(45) Rechg(46) Rechg(46)
47) --> Mind Over Body==> DmgRes(47) DmgRes(48) DmgRes(48)
49) --> Dominate==> Acc(49) Hold(50) Hold(50) Hold(50)
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01) --> Sprint==> Run(1)
01) --> Brawl==> Dmg(1)
01) --> Vigilance==> Empty(1)
02) --> Rest==> Rechg(2)
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naughtly shimmer, i think we might have to start the spankings...

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Quick, I must save hoplite from the evils of temptation!

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Excepting your teammates not to die over the lifetime of your levelling is naíve - if you need a power to fill the slot you might as well make it worthwhile when you use it.

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Well, I did base some of my build on The_Spad's Kin/Elec build in a different thread, so a few similarities are had there.

I'll replace the Def+ in Hover for Flight Speed then, and the Def+ in Stealth for End Reduction.

I can't leave Increase Density until later, as it was already picked when I started this thread, as I'm at the position of picking my level 10 power. But I will move the Dam Res slots elsewhere.

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look, its the old man from scene 43...

GET ON WITH IT!!!

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Huh?

And I AM getting on with it! Don't you want to know why Atta's so dangerous that a Security Level 50 is needed to take him on...?

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its a quote from Monty Python and the Holy Grail, ive got it somewhere, will let u watch it at some point.

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I'm shocked that she considers herself a geek-chick and didn't know that instantly.

On-topic, good writing, and don't listen to silly people asking you to rush it.

Was bored; so did the plan now.

If there's anything glaringly wrong with it, let me know.

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Name: Mind Sweeper
Level: 50
Archetype: Defender
Primary: Kinetics
Secondary: Psychic Blast
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01) --> Transfusion==> Acc(1) Acc(3) Rechg(3) Heal(5) Heal(5) Heal(7)
01) --> Mental Blast==> Dmg(1)
02) --> Siphon Power==> Acc(2) Acc(9) Rechg(9) Rechg(11) Rechg(11)
04) --> Subdue==> Acc(4) Dmg(7) Dmg(13)
06) --> Siphon Speed==> Acc(6) Acc(13) Rechg(15) Rechg(15) Rechg(17)
08) --> Increase Density==> DmgRes(8) DmgRes(17) DmgRes(19)
10) --> Hover==> DefBuf(10) DefBuf(40)
12) --> Speed Boost==> EndMod(12) EndMod(25) EndMod(31)
14) --> Psionic Lance==> Rechg(14) Dmg(27) Dmg(29) Dmg(29)
16) --> Telekinetic Blast==> Acc(16) Acc(19) Dmg(21) Rechg(23) Dmg(34) Dmg(42)
18) --> Inertial Reduction==> Jump(18)
20) --> Will Domination==> Acc(20) Dmg(21) Rechg(23) Dmg(25) Rechg(36) Dmg(43)
22) --> Assault==> EndRdx(22)
24) --> Tactics==> EndRdx(24) TH_Buf(27) TH_Buf(31) TH_Buf(43)
26) --> Transference==> Acc(26) Rechg(31) Rechg(33) EndMod(33) EndMod(33) EndMod(48)
28) --> Psychic Scream==> Acc(28) Dmg(34) Dmg(34) Rechg(42)
30) --> Hurdle==> Jump(30)
32) --> Fulcrum Shift==> Acc(32) Acc(36) Acc(37) Rechg(37) Rechg(37) Rechg(45)
35) --> Stealth==> EndRdx(35) DefBuf(36) EndRdx(42)
38) --> Psychic Wail==> Acc(38) Acc(39) Dmg(39) Rechg(39) Rechg(40) Rechg(40)
41) --> Vengeance==> DefBuf(41) DefBuf(43) DefBuf(45) TH_Buf(46)
44) --> Mass Hypnosis==> Acc(44) Rechg(45) Rechg(46) Rechg(46)
47) --> Mind Over Body==> DmgRes(47) DmgRes(48) DmgRes(48)
49) --> Dominate==> Acc(49) Hold(50) Hold(50) Hold(50)
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01) --> Sprint==> Run(1)
01) --> Brawl==> Dmg(1)
01) --> Vigilance==> Empty(1)
02) --> Rest==> Rechg(2)
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Thankyou very much for the tips guys, hopefully I'll be able to put up a planned build tomorrow, after I choose what to take for level 10.

Let's just hope Max rememebrs to use a *paintball* gun.

The Masquerade Department does some Detective work, but it's a Federal group, so is a combination of different things. Plus, there's only me in it.

Okay, so far we have

-Paintballing
-Bowling
-Drinking

This might actually work...

Can we shout "Deviant" instead?

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