You Play Mine and I Play Yours! REVISED EDITION
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CaptainAmazing,
Posted on: 2009-05-10 08:47 in Mission Architect
Ok played it. It was a good solid arc, pretty much like one of the better standard regular game arcs. The challenges were tough but not overwhelming. I gave it 4 stars.
Now to pick nits.
Mission 1: The contact said the place was crawling with CoT, but there wasn't a single CoT to be found.
Mission 2: If you are going to have multiple patrols with dialogue then it's a good idea to create them as separate patrols rather than just multiples of one patrol. The problem with multiples of one patrol is they all repeat the same dialogue and it begins to sound like a joke that is being passed around the office "Why did the chicken cross the road?" "To fight the Three Fold King."
3rd Mission: This office only actually has about 4 spawn points for hostages or glowies. So when you put in multiple glowies and multiple hostages it's a guarantee that one of the rooms at least is going to be a bit crowded. First room I entered had all the objectives except 1 hostage and 1 glowie. Each of those missing ones wound up in a room of its own. I suggest either finding a different map or reducing it to one hostage.
5th Mission: In the intro to the 5th mission one of the sentences is "I won't like to you name." I suspect that you meant it to be "I won't lie to you $name."
I guess that's pretty much it other than random chance playing a part. Like I said, overall a solid story and the Lemurians were a well thought out and interesting group.
My arc is 113956 "The Devs must die!"
Don't count your weasels before they pop dink!
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Ok played it. It was a good solid arc, pretty much like one of the better standard regular game arcs. The challenges were tough but not overwhelming. I gave it 4 stars.
Now to pick nits.
Mission 1: The contact said the place was crawling with CoT, but there wasn't a single CoT to be found.
Mission 2: If you are going to have multiple patrols with dialogue then it's a good idea to create them as separate patrols rather than just multiples of one patrol. The problem with multiples of one patrol is they all repeat the same dialogue and it begins to sound like a joke that is being passed around the office "Why did the chicken cross the road?" "To fight the Three Fold King."
3rd Mission: This office only actually has about 4 spawn points for hostages or glowies. So when you put in multiple glowies and multiple hostages it's a guarantee that one of the rooms at least is going to be a bit crowded. First room I entered had all the objectives except 1 hostage and 1 glowie. Each of those missing ones wound up in a room of its own. I suggest either finding a different map or reducing it to one hostage.
5th Mission: In the intro to the 5th mission one of the sentences is "I won't like to you name." I suspect that you meant it to be "I won't lie to you $name."
I guess that's pretty much it other than random chance playing a part. Like I said, overall a solid story and the Lemurians were a well thought out and interesting group.
My arc is 113956 "The Devs must die!"
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I am thinking of changing the 3rd mission to a bigger map. Good suggestion
I may split the patrols up, or lower the amount.
Mission 1 is supposed to be a lie. Like he thinks there are COT but in reality there are not.
As for the 5th mish, thanks for pointin that out :P Spelling and grammer sometimes get the better of me.
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Mission 1 is supposed to be a lie. Like he thinks there are COT but in reality there are not.
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Then in that case I would expand what he says. In other words something like "I expected Lemurians but I'm honestly surprised that there were no CoT." Since he doesn't actually mention the lack of Circle it seems like they just didn't spawn.
Don't count your weasels before they pop dink!
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Mission 1 is supposed to be a lie. Like he thinks there are COT but in reality there are not.
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Then in that case I would expand what he says. In other words something like "I expected Lemurians but I'm honestly surprised that there were no CoT." Since he doesn't actually mention the lack of Circle it seems like they just didn't spawn.
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Hrmm perhaps I shall throw a pat in there!
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Shield Shocker - Arc 153323 White Collar Crime (IN PROGRESS)
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Capt Amazing - Arc 1033 The Wool Over One's Eyes
Mandu - Arc 113956 "The Devs Must Die"
Dragon Fist Tavian - Arc 164362
Cien Feugos - Arc 164839
So far people seem to enjoy my arc!
(edit) oops i forgot, i need to submit a review... you will get one shortly... sorry, first thing in the monrning, no coffee yet...
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I gave "Three Fold King" 4 stars. I thought it was a solid, enjoyable arc. The custom critters are cool-looking, and they seem fairly balanced. I was playing a lvl 44 crab soldier, and was able to solo the final boss without much trouble.
I do wish I'd gotten a little more background on the Lemurians. Who are they, besides "Guys who live underground and want to invade us"? The contact, Cramer, seemed a little underdeveloped too. We find out as we go along that he's been withholding information from us, but it's not really clear why. He has an indirect connection to the bad guys, but nothing really comes of it. I'm guessing that maybe this is just the first part of a longer story you have planned? If so, I'll look forward to seeing the rest of it.
My arc is 99458, "The Unbearable Being of Lightness". It's a hero arc for levels 5-30. It should be mostly solo-friendly, but there's an AV/EB in the last mission who might give squishies some trouble. Thanks!
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Didn't I post in here? o.@
I had to remake the thread Amazing :P
<facefault> Alright i'll play again! O_@ My list is getting too long! :P
-C.A.
Dude you aint gotta play again, unless you wanna add ANOTHER Arc for me to play
I did change the text / motivation / objectives. So its a different arc, story wise.
Shield Shocker - Arc 153323 White Collar Crime
Ok, for my review of this (and its pretty basic) I want to start with the enemy choices. I hate Freakshow, personally. Not because they are hard for me, or anything.
I just hate the self res. HATE the self res. I never know if they are gonna stay down, and it drives me nuts. That aside, its not bad!
Mission 2: Your special boss had the tag "All Custom Characters" instead of any specific enemy group. You might wanna fix that. Same with Mission 4's boss. He had the same tag, which kinda broke the immersion.
Missions 1 and 2 and even 3 to a point seemed very...generic. I was ready to give you a 3 when I hit mission 4. Not alot challenges my SS/WP Brute. But Mission 4 did.
I ran into a room and got promptly faceplanted. That threw me off. Then I realized how hard that custom group really was. I took it slow from there.
For once the allies were not overpowered. I am used to getting an ally who could solo the mission. By the same token however, they were a bit underpowered and in a few occasions died.
Finally, Mission 4 had a CRAPTON of objectives crammed into 1 map. While not "bad" per say, I was confused when I zoned in and saw like 5 different specific things.
All in all, a 4 star mission, thanks to the final part
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Shield Shocker - Arc 153323 White Collar Crime
Ok, for my review of this (and its pretty basic) I want to start with the enemy choices. I hate Freakshow, personally. Not because they are hard for me, or anything.
I just hate the self res. HATE the self res. I never know if they are gonna stay down, and it drives me nuts. That aside, its not bad!
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Thanks for reviewing this! Ah, bad luck that you hate the Freaks. I enjoy them personally, but more importantly they make sense as villains involved in stealing technology.
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Mission 2: Your special boss had the tag "All Custom Characters" instead of any specific enemy group. You might wanna fix that. Same with Mission 4's boss. He had the same tag, which kinda broke the immersion.
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Hm, they shouldn't, but I must have messed something up there. Should be an easy fix, thanks for pointing it out!
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Missions 1 and 2 and even 3 to a point seemed very...generic. I was ready to give you a 3 when I hit mission 4. Not alot challenges my SS/WP Brute. But Mission 4 did.
I ran into a room and got promptly faceplanted. That threw me off. Then I realized how hard that custom group really was. I took it slow from there.
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Thanks, good to hear that they challenged you. I hope they were not too powerful once you realized they'd require your full attention. I tried to balance them to be challenging but not too hard.
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For once the allies were not overpowered. I am used to getting an ally who could solo the mission. By the same token however, they were a bit underpowered and in a few occasions died.
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I also prefer my allies to not be too overpowered. I tried these guys out as minions and bosses and decided having the majority as lieutenants worked best in terms of providing some assistance without overshadowing the player's character. Their strength should be in numbers if you can keep them alive.
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Finally, Mission 4 had a CRAPTON of objectives crammed into 1 map. While not "bad" per say, I was confused when I zoned in and saw like 5 different specific things.
All in all, a 4 star mission, thanks to the final part
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Thanks, not sure how much I really want to trim from the grand finale there, would color coding some of those objectives help at all?
Thanks for the good rating, I'm glad you had fun overall and a big thanks for posting a review. 
The Wool Over One's Eyes
Ok, I just finished this one, and I give it a solid 4. And here is why!
Firstly, I kinda figured that I would be "lead astray" given the name of the arc. That being said, you had to read the clues and such to really get an idea of what was going on. Story wise, I was really amused.
Once again, there were FREAKS. ARG! I hate those things! However, I actually felt BAD for them, given that the dialogue indicated their situation. In fact, now I got ideas for a fun arc hehe.
Anyway, after the freaks I ran into 5th Column, which always makes me smile. Who doesnt like being up Nazis? I know I do! 
The mission with the gang war was kinda...eh. There were ALOT of dudes running around, and once again, the blasted freaks. Ohhh how I hate those self ressing bastards. The "finale" as it was, was interesting, and thats when I actually got what was going on.
The real finale was pretty cool, but once again those allies were crazy strong. I am not sure how you could fix it though, as it seemed that if they were not that powerful the customs would have eaten em alive. The final boss was fun and I actually would like a sequel to this arc so I could find out what really was going on.
All in all, a solid 4 (I wouldnt play it again, but you SHOULD play it once!)
Current Que!
Mandu - Arc 113956 "The Devs Must Die"
Dragon Fist Tavian - Arc 164362
Cien Feugos - Arc 164839
JKevinCarrier - 99458, "The Unbearable Being of Lightness
Hey Ridiculous Girl, I need a review or something before I can add ya to the que Although I am interested in your "Hero Therapy"
Hey Stomp, I started your arc tonight. Got through four missions before I had to quit. But, I rated 5-stars. (I will run it to completion, already re-started and re-ran the first 2 missions -- I'll wrap it up tomorrow).
But, I liked the story, and your custom mobs. An entertaining arc, and I look forward to wrapping up the 5th mission.
Through the first four missions, I noticed the following typos and errors you might want to correct. I'll provide additional feedback on mission five tomorrow.
I'd welcome your feedback on my arc, 21144, Spanks For The Memories. Cheers! 
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Mission One:
1. Preamble and Post-amble typo: "artefact" [sic] should be spelled "artifact".
2. Preamble grammar: "I myself" is clunky English. Delete "myself".
3. Mission entry pop-up: "salt" should read as "salty".
Mission Two:
1. Preamble typo: "its" [sic] should be "it's" or "it is".
2. Preamble typo: "Tuath [sic] de Dannan" should be "Tuatha de Dannan".
3. Mission entry pop-up: delete the word "with". Alternatively, change it to "with it". Incorrect grammar as is.
4. Post-amble typo: "Thats" [sic] should read "That's" or "That is".
5. Clue typo: "Priests" is possessive, so should read "Priest's".
Mission Three:
1. Preamble: The word "Hostages" is capitalized for no reason.
2. Mission acceptance text: "Lets" [sic] should read "Let's".
3. Mission entry pop-up: "salt" should read as "salty"
4. Exit pop-up: clunky English. I suggest revising to read, "...the rune itself sparkles like a diamond."
Mission Four:
1. Preamble: highlighted sentence is completed with two periods.
2. Navigation Bar mission text: 'multiple' text for the collectible objective should be pluralized. As it stands, it says "4 Crate", "3 Crate" etc.
Q. Just wondering Posi, where are the new dance emotes we were told would come with GR?
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The Wool Over One's Eyes
Ok, I just finished this one, and I give it a solid 4. And here is why!
Firstly, I kinda figured that I would be "lead astray" given the name of the arc. That being said, you had to read the clues and such to really get an idea of what was going on. Story wise, I was really amused.
Once again, there were FREAKS. ARG! I hate those things! However, I actually felt BAD for them, given that the dialogue indicated their situation. In fact, now I got ideas for a fun arc hehe.
Anyway, after the freaks I ran into 5th Column, which always makes me smile. Who doesnt like being up Nazis? I know I do!
The mission with the gang war was kinda...eh. There were ALOT of dudes running around, and once again, the blasted freaks. Ohhh how I hate those self ressing bastards. The "finale" as it was, was interesting, and thats when I actually got what was going on.
The real finale was pretty cool, but once again those allies were crazy strong. I am not sure how you could fix it though, as it seemed that if they were not that powerful the customs would have eaten em alive. The final boss was fun and I actually would like a sequel to this arc so I could find out what really was going on.
All in all, a solid 4 (I wouldnt play it again, but you SHOULD play it once!)
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Thank you for your kind words and feedback!
-C.A
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Hey Stomp, I started your arc tonight. Got through four missions before I had to quit. But, I rated 5-stars. (I will run it to completion, already re-started and re-ran the first 2 missions -- I'll wrap it up tomorrow).
But, I liked the story, and your custom mobs. An entertaining arc, and I look forward to wrapping up the 5th mission.
Through the first four missions, I noticed the following typos and errors you might want to correct. I'll provide additional feedback on mission five tomorrow.
I'd welcome your feedback on my arc, 21144, Spanks For The Memories. Cheers!
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Mission One:
1. Preamble and Post-amble typo: "artefact" [sic] should be spelled "artifact".
2. Preamble grammar: "I myself" is clunky English. Delete "myself".
3. Mission entry pop-up: "salt" should read as "salty".
Mission Two:
1. Preamble typo: "its" [sic] should be "it's" or "it is".
2. Preamble typo: "Tuath [sic] de Dannan" should be "Tuatha de Dannan".
3. Mission entry pop-up: delete the word "with". Alternatively, change it to "with it". Incorrect grammar as is.
4. Post-amble typo: "Thats" [sic] should read "That's" or "That is".
5. Clue typo: "Priests" is possessive, so should read "Priest's".
Mission Three:
1. Preamble: The word "Hostages" is capitalized for no reason.
2. Mission acceptance text: "Lets" [sic] should read "Let's".
3. Mission entry pop-up: "salt" should read as "salty"
4. Exit pop-up: clunky English. I suggest revising to read, "...the rune itself sparkles like a diamond."
Mission Four:
1. Preamble: highlighted sentence is completed with two periods.
2. Navigation Bar mission text: 'multiple' text for the collectible objective should be pluralized. As it stands, it says "4 Crate", "3 Crate" etc.
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Thanks! Artifact is purposefully mispelled, as I have seen it spelled that way in other places. Its a style thing. The rest are corrections I do indeed need to make.
Stomp, if there's a rebuild on the Arc, I'll grab a friend of mine and re-run the arc. Alternatively, I can wait until there are some more revisions from playtesting to run it again (got several arcs on my plate atm)
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I am gonna make a few more, but I did do a HEAVY revision, and rebuild. Most of the remaining changes are grammer / spelling.
Well, I'll give it through the weekend and see how things go, okay? =D
"...his madness keeps him sane.": My Profile on VirtueVerse
Can You WIN the Internet? MA Arc #85544
Inhuman Resources - At Work with IE #298132
Task Force Mutternacht #349522 <-- 1st AE Challenge
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1. Preamble and Post-amble typo: "artefact" [sic] should be spelled "artifact".
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Artifact is purposefully mispelled, as I have seen it spelled that way in other places. Its a style thing.
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FYI Artefact is English.
Ah well there ya go!
Here is my story Arc. global name: @ladiosssopp
Story Arc: Austrian Polytechnic ArcID: 19239
On the fly review. Playing through the story with Nikumu, my 33 BS/Inv scrapper.
The contact looks a bit like Penn from Penn and Teller :P
Mission 1: Caves....at least they are the large caves. No real problems. The invis boss threw me for a loop because I was stealthing through the map and heard him, but couldn't find him. Last encounter was rough, but other than that no one I couldn't handle. Overall the minions have a nice balance, although the -tohit from the darkness can be rough.
Mission 2: Intro text explains the situation. Not sure I like the contact all that much. Hasn't really sold me on the urgency of avoiding this invasion yet. Outdoor map. Not too hard to find the loot and run.
Mission 3: Nice office map and new objectives. It would be better if the Legacy Chain hostages looked like Legacy Chain (since they have good costumes).
Mission 4: Ok, the contact buttered me up some. Flattery is always nice...also makes me think he might be hiding something. Love the Rikti base maps. So far the change of pace from mission to mission has been good. Nice set of objectives. From a design perspective you might just create a "search crate" function without a number listed and throw a few more fakes in there. Nice some hidden lore in the crates. (Love playing someone who can 2-shot night widows). Bosses not too difficult...Dual Wield can lay out some serious damage.
Mission 5: Boy that was an efforless spell :P Orenbega map to end with. I like them, but know a lot of ppl who don't. War God, time to meet the Goddess of Hate...Of course I choose the wrong pathway...Final Boss was not too difficult. Of course he played against my strengths...
Final Thoughts: Well done arc. There is enough story to keep it interesting and the custom baddies are well rounded enough to cause some problems without being overpowering. Gave it a 4.5 stars (rounded to 5 in game)
Ok Guys, I am creating a new thread, as I am going to start doing things differently yet again!
Cause I had an AWESOME idea Totally gonna work it
http://boards.cityofheroes.com/showf...page=0&vc=
There be the thread if you wanna look
Ok so I am having to remake this thread, as I have revised my arc HEAVILY and had to unpublish and republish it. FEH! Anyone who previously played my arc, don't worry, I still got your names and I will still play yours.
Anyway, after heavily revising my arc, I ran into an issue where it would not save published (stupid collection trick) and thankfully was saved as an Autosave. So, the arc itself is VERY different (story wise) then previously.
The arc I am wanting played through is called "Return of the Three Fold King".
Its a 5 arc story based creation, fairly serious. I would not play it with anyone under level 20, due to the strength of the custom enemies. I was able to finish the first 2 missions on my level 13 Scrapper, but I am fairly sure lower levels would have a SERIOUS issue. (And I am using the standard level powers on my customs, save for the Boss level ones eheh)
So here is the basic deal:
You play mine. Leave me feedback here and also leave me a feedback note in game so I know you actually played it. The in game feedback can be as simple as "Check your Forum Post".
Please try to rate it. I want an honest opinion if possible.
With your feedback here, leave me your arc number. Be aware of the following: I play solo, I have access to a level 34 SS/WP Brute, a level 28 FM/WP Scrapper, and my current and preferred character, a level 15 DM/WP Scrapper. I will play Heroic stuff on my brute cause I quite frankly don't care.
Here is the arc info!
Name: Return of the Three Fold King
Arc ID: 163274
Total Mission: 5
Enemy Types: Arachnos, Tuatha de Dannon, Custom
Description: Professor John Cramer has put out a call for heroes. He has found the location of a missing Lemurian Artefact and needs the assistance of a real hero to retrieve it. However, this simple mission unearths a much more dangerous event: The Return of the Three Fold King.
Current People I owe a Review To:
Shield Shocker - Arc 153323 White Collar Crime (IN PROGRESS)
Pogothulu - Arc *UNKNOWN* use global @Pogoman
Capt Amazing - Arc 1033 The Wool Over One's Eyes
If any of you have played my arc (Including YOU Heroic) and want to try it again, with the improvements, please do, and I will re-review your arc with a different character (if you made changes as well)
Thanks in advance!