"The Lord Of Valhalla" - By Buckeyestar

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Yeah, that helps. Me am bad with speeling and gramur. Hukt on fonix wurkt for me.

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It needs more fixing, but the bones are solid. (Although sentences like this: "One day as Mikel neared the age for his Rite of Passage, when a young man begins the path to becoming a true warrior," cause me cognitive dissonance because it's a dangling phrase.)

I'd like to see the soulmate play a bigger role in tempering his wrath to drive that point home and you can't technically banish yourself, but overall it's pretty good. It does conflict with established mythology, but in cases like these I just assume that it takes place in an alternate universe where the story turns out differently.

All that reading! I think my brain is stuck on pause!

Nah, I kid. My brain is too powerful to be waylayed by a mere work of fiction. Mua ha ha ha ha!

When beginning this project I did a little reading up on the Norse pantheon. In the actually story, Thor's final battle was against the Midgard Serpent. He strikes the killing blow, walks nine steps and falls over dead. Since TA had to be the one to kill Thor, I figured I could mess with the history some more.

I see what you were talking about in regards that particular sentence. It seems my brain went AWOL at that point and broke up one coherent sentence into 2 incomplete senteneces.

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Nice job Buckey! I know well how long TA has been trying to tell that tale. Glad someone was able to put it down on paper for him

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*hugs Alty*


I hope ya don't take offense and I would actually still love to read what you had. It's just that I've had so many requests for his bio and I didn't wanna embarass myself lol!


I still love ya Peaches!

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Nope no offense taken. Nothing to be offended about. It's the tale of TA and like the images, there should be many versions. That's how you create a legend!

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When beginning this project I did a little reading up on the Norse pantheon. In the actually story, Thor's final battle was against the Midgard Serpent. He strikes the killing blow, walks nine steps and falls over dead. Since TA had to be the one to kill Thor, I figured I could mess with the history some more.

I see what you were talking about in regards that particular sentence. It seems my brain went AWOL at that point and broke up one coherent sentence into 2 incomplete senteneces.

[/ QUOTE ] The serpent being Jörmungandr, right?

Yes, I believe that was its name.

this was great and you have inspired me to post my bio.