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Longbow. Heroes or Villians? Could Longbow be a secret villian group that has been able to plant a hold in Paragon City? I, Dr. Theed, super genius have found out the truth. When I was clearing out a base of Longbow I found a disc that had information about Longbow selling weapons to thugs and selling drugs that give super powers to thugs. Heroes if you are reading this beware and villians, are you going to let another villian group take you down. Down with Longbow!
Are you done yet?
Shut up Term.
Make me!
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Shut up Term.
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Why don't you take your own advice first.
Both of you shut up
How about you just learn to leave when you're not welcome.
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Both of you shut up
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Say please!
term please sthu
This has to be the most rediculous thread I have ever seen in my whole life. Ok, the OP had a weak post, but at least he tried... and the rest of the posts were just... omg... everyone (including myself) shut up and go play the freakin game.
You apparently have a weak idea of "tried". He's got numerous, numerous "story" topics with equally crappy stories, bumps them to get replies (which is against forum rules), and has an arrogant, self-righteous attitude. And I didn't even do anything in the first place, all I asked is if he was done yet. Take that as you will, but there's nothing the least bit aggressive about that.
Also, thanks for the laughs. I haven't been told to go "shut up" so many times ever since 5th grade.
>.>
<.<
*White flag*
I did nothing.
All your base are belong to us.
Stop fight.
Don't you dare get me involved.
Too late.
Do not read the following post if you do not care to listen to a huge rant.
You have been warned.
I take it if you have reached this point, you intend on continue to read this post.
/rant
I have struggled not to lose my temper of patience with your so called "stories" and "ideas."
I have a few suggestions suggestions...No COMMANDS for you.
A: IF you write anything, make sure it has substance.
B: Don't bump your own thread.
C: Post all your stuff in ONE THREAD.
D: Don't tell people to shut up when YOU are the one who needs to be shutting up yourself. Why don't you LISTEN? Maybe then your posts wouldn't be huge practical jokes!
Lets take an old example of some of your antics, shall we?
I'm DARK-Bot 1. Part of Arachnos Project DARK (See Arachnos Project DARK). My contacts tell me that Longbow has set up a base in Mercy Mercy. I've brought my teammate, Dr. Theed to help me clear it out. I've also heard that the hero, Energy Attacker is there. Right now we're on the first floor. Longbow is crawling all over the place. All of a sudden Energy Attacker and 12 Longbow jump out in front of us. "Stop in the name of the law!" Yells Energy Attacker. Thinking quickly Dr. Theed shoots him with a laser blast and I send the Longbow flying with a super punch. The heroes down and all of the Longbow are cleared out. Mission complete.
The above is a post made by you. This could be considered a bad post. Another user of the forums by the name of Guiding_Spirit is now going to attempt to be constructive and kind. He does this by re-writing your story in a more colorful way, making it look decent and respectable. Here it is
Hey mate, how's it going?
Um, this is a story, right? Well, under that assumption, I think you may need some help.
Firstly, the length might need to be worked on. One paragraph won't do much in anyone's mind, so I may be able to help you flesh it out.
All of a sudden Energy Attacker and 12 Longbow jump out in front of us. "Stop in the name of the law!" Yells Energy Attacker.
Here, let's add a bit of description.
Coming from the blue, 12 Longbow agents surrounded me, training their weapons upon me and Dr. Theed. A thirteenth, more unique character, joined their group, his eyes hard and focused on us.
Settling back into a fighting pose, I flexed my hand experimentally. A worried look crossed some of the newer Longbow recruit's faces, but the Captain settled them down with one direct look.
Tension filled the air, Dr Theed shuffled restlessly next to me, his outstanding mind go through various scenes and possible strategies to get us out of this mess. Catching my eye, he nodded twice, giving me a signal we had agreed upon before we had entered into this melee. Moving at impossible speeds, I quickly knocked out two Longbow Agents and spun wildly, searching for my next victim.
"Stop in the name of the law!" The strange, thirteenth member of the Longbow group said. A memory sparked in my mind, and I quickly assumed that this was the hero called Energy Attacker. Leaping for me, his hands began glowing as he manipulated the energy flowing through the air, intent on causing me harm.
Dr Theed reacted quickly. Pulling a small laser gun from his pocket, his sent two, small concussion blasts into the chest of the hero, throwing him into the air and away from me. While the Longbow agents were watching their hero fly for the first time, I used their distraction to disarm, knock out, or in the case of one, unfortunate Longbow, kill.
Satisfied, I smiled evilly, sharing a triumphant look with Dr Theed.
"Mission complete."
See how I fleshed that half of the paragraph into roughly three paragraphs? It can be as easy as that. Describing how things look, feel, sound, taste or smell can increase the length by tons, keep the readers interested and other people smiling.
C ya!
Guiding Spirit
Thank you very much Guiding_Spirit. Now, how does our subject deal with this new post? Hmmm?
You quote it and slope the entire thing right below the original post.
Not. Right.
Here is what you did wrong
You bumped your thread. This happens whenever somebody intentionally posts next to nothing, or posts irrelevant information that has already been clearly conveyed in a recent space of time.
You also pretty much stole his work and claimed it for yourself, instead of bothering to do any work yourself.
Im going to say the exact same thing our Guiding_Spirit said. Feel free to use more detail. Flesh out your story, make it come to life. However, cutting and pasting from something that has already been written and does not belong to you does not in any way qualify as creative writing. Sorry to break it to you, but that is not how life works!
Next. Above all, do not insult viewers who post in your threads unless in EXTREME cases, and even then, you still arent allowed to insult Lazarus, of all people. Do not post negative opinions or views about other people unless, again, extreme circumstances arise.
Feel free to respond however you wish to this post of mine. I will not be checking back at any point in time in ANY of your threads unless otherwise informed by other sources that you have finally had some brains inserted into the currently empty vacuum that is your skull.
I used to be just like you. I am not trying to start a flame war and/or argument. This is some advice. From my own personal experiences. I still have not yet entirely recovered from all the [censored] I have caused, and I am merely trying to spare you the same ordeal.
/endrant
Now think happy thoughts. Cheers.
/applaud LordDiov
Diov wins the thread.
THIS TIME.
Longbow. Heroes or Villians? Could Longbow be a secret villian group that has been able to plant a hold in Paragon City? I, Dr. Theed, super genius have found out the truth. When I was clearing out a base of Longbow I found a disc that had information about Longbow selling weapons to thugs and selling drugs that give super powers to thugs. Heroes if you are reading this beware and villians, areyou going to let another villian group take you down.