Well since no one else has I'll give it a go. You didn't specify if you're looking for critique on design, layout, content or artwork so in turn...
Design; Looks good and with that much blue space it would be easy to resize it for different dimension desktops (1600x1200 1920x1200 etc). Two things I would suggest:
1. The "legacy" lettering doesn't match too well with the CoH lettering. The white ->black gradient only stands out from the dark blue because of the gray fringe. Perhaps different colors or remove the fringe but give it an outer glow like the CoH lettering (maybe ever brighter to draw attention) to better tie it in.
2. You have to make a decision if you want Posi and his green glow to be it's own design element confined within the stripe or not. If yes widen the stripe or restrict the glow if no then I would extend it more, right now it looks like it's accidentally spilling over.
Layout; I think the CoH LoS would look better centered. As a desktop most people have their icons along the left wall and this would cover up the letters and make for a jumbled look. The Posi stripe is okay on the right but some people have icons there too so if you wanted the most compatibility I would say make the Posi stripe down the middle with the lettering above it.
Content; Is/Was Posi ever a member of Vanguard? I know the Phalanx tangled with them over the Rikti in the comics. If you are not meaning to show his connection to van directly maybe move their emblem up and bracket either side of the lettering. Or use the Phalanx logo or some combination.
Artwork; Big thing here is to consider your light source. If his hands are the light source, as the lighting on his legs and torso suggest, then some things need to change. His helmet and shoulders are lit from the front by something inches away from his face and right about visor level but his hands are down and cast backward in what looks like the start of the Electron Haze animation. Also might consider some rim lighting in a bright green at places like the bottom line of the shoulder pads etc.
The particles orbiting his hands could have their trails stand out a bit more.
That what you were looking for?
Looking good though and I'm interested to see what comes of this. 
Cheers!
P.S. From a layout standpoint what do you think of this?
The cuts and lineups aren't precise this is just a quick and dirty
cut/move to show what I mean.This would allow icons to either side.
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Well since no one else has I'll give it a go. You didn't specify if you're looking for critique on design, layout, content or artwork so in turn...
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Design; Looks good and with that much blue space it would be easy to resize it for different dimension desktops (1600x1200 1920x1200 etc). Two things I would suggest:
1. The "legacy" lettering doesn't match too well with the CoH lettering. The white ->black gradient only stands out from the dark blue because of the gray fringe. Perhaps different colors or remove the fringe but give it an outer glow like the CoH lettering (maybe ever brighter to draw attention) to better tie it in. 2. You have to make a decision if you want Posi and his green glow to be it's own design element confined within the stripe or not. If yes widen the stripe or restrict the glow if no then I would extend it more, right now it looks like it's accidentally spilling over. Layout; I think the CoH LoS would look better centered. As a desktop most people have their icons along the left wall and this would cover up the letters and make for a jumbled look. The Posi stripe is okay on the right but some people have icons there too so if you wanted the most compatibility I would say make the Posi stripe down the middle with the lettering above it. |
All good and valid points. I'm not personally a fan of centered wall-papers, but that's an opinion thing. As for the lettering of "A Legacy of Sin"... that one I have to grind my teeth on a bit. Like I said I had originally made this wall-paper as a tie in piece to my Legacy of Sin fan-comics so I want the logo to be consistent across its' usages.
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Content; Is/Was Posi ever a member of Vanguard? I know the Phalanx tangled with them over the Rikti in the comics. If you are not meaning to show his connection to van directly maybe move their emblem up and bracket either side of the lettering. Or use the Phalanx logo or some combination.
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In the cannon storyline no, Positron was never a member of Vanguard. In my Legacy of Sin storyline everyone more or less winds up either officially joining Vanguard, working for them, or working for someone who is working for them. And now that I actually type that thought out and look at it I'm thinking it would probably work better to get rid of the Vanguard logo in this particular instance all together.
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Artwork; Big thing here is to consider your light source. If his hands are the light source, as the lighting on his legs and torso suggest, then some things need to change. His helmet and shoulders are lit from the front by something inches away from his face and right about visor level but his hands are down and cast backward in what looks like the start of the Electron Haze animation. Also might consider some rim lighting in a bright green at places like the bottom line of the shoulder pads etc.
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The particles orbiting his hands could have their trails stand out a bit more.
That what you were looking for? Looking good though and I'm interested to see what comes of this. Cheers! P.S. From a layout standpoint what do you think of this? The cuts and lineups aren't precise this is just a quick and dirty cut/move to show what I mean.This would allow icons to either side. |
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How said is it that this is the high point of my day today?
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) I always enjoy when there are comments or some constructive criticism in my thread.No worries just suggesting what might make it blend better with the CoH, if you
want it to stand out or have a specific logo already set go with it.
The van logo works if it's a big part of the story was just suggesting other ways to incorporate it not so tied to Posi.
As I remember he was tolerated but the phalanx was told but out more than once. Either way.
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you know, I can remember when I started the coloring that I really liked the 3-light sources look of it. But now that I'm actually looking at it I'm like "Okay the lighting is good. But what I was going for?"
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Like I said, I don't personally care for center-centric wall papers but that's a personal preference. I'm also beyond mental about keeping my desktop neat and orderly as much as possible.
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The centered image was just for maximum compatibility with as many desktops as possible.
If that really bugs you how about having the stripe, text and posi all going up the right
side (with or without the van logo) or half way between right wall and center?
These are just suggestions, if they don't work for you, no worries.
Cheers!
I can't put my finger on it, but something about the layout changes you recommended coupled with a bit more controlled lighting effect changes the whole design and I rather like this particular center-centric layout:
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I've also been working on a Manticore wall-paper in the same style as the Positron one:
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I can't figure how to do Manticore's eyes so he doesn't look evil or like he's a drug head. I want him to look stern and intimidating. Not necessarily evil.
So I was shifting through my files and ran across a Wall-paper I had started several months ago. I had started it in conjunction with my City of Heroes: A Legacy of Sin fan-comics, but never really got around to finishing it up. So I dropped it into Photoshop and spent a couple hours putting some more work onto it. I don't know if I would say it's 'complete' but it's as done as I can afford to make it at this time. So I figured I'd post it up, ask for feed back and critique on it and when I have the time, go back and apply the feed back on it.
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