Wanted to stick my oar in. Nice work. The story is a tiny bit cliched, but then, this is a comic-book setting and you've got a nice style for this kind of tale. I'm not a major fan of this art style, except where it fits. I had a drawing of my main done by one of the Draw The World artists and it happened to be similar to your style, but it just worked well for the character, and the same is true for your work here. Nice.
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Wanted to stick my oar in. Nice work. The story is a tiny bit cliched, but then, this is a comic-book setting and you've got a nice style for this kind of tale. I'm not a major fan of this art style, except where it fits. I had a drawing of my main done by one of the Draw The World artists and it happened to be similar to your style, but it just worked well for the character, and the same is true for your work here. Nice.
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thanks Ravenswing, nice to know someone's looking at it anyway 
fourth and final page of the introduction. i've deliberately kept things vague - both the plot and doc d's look, as these pages were just meant as a mood setter. action to come.
page four
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plodding on with the story...
this is the first actual page of the narrative, as i finally get to the story
page five
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carrying on... is anyone looking at this by the way? 
page six
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Yes.
It's awesome, carry on 
I am the Blaster, I have filled the role of Tank, Controller and Defender
Sometimes all at once.
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Yes, and despite your request for opinions on page six, I think I want to see a couple more pages before deciding what I think of it, so I'm just posting this to say I'm watching. 
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thanks you two
here's the next page, advancing into the story. i've always felt that detective work is something that's been missiong in CoH missions, perhaps it's something that could be addressed with i13..?
page seven
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Yep, been keeping an eye on pages, just had a busy week and weekend. Tonight is put aside to catch up in here so Im happy.
I do like your style. I must say that ages ago when I first saw a couple of your pictures I wasnt sure, but its really grown on me and I love it now. I find it difficult to comment on how good the actual art work is as Im no artist, I will say, however:
- I dont like the vague face on page two (but understand why you are keeping it vague at the moment)
- The background on page one seems to light for an alley, and for the sense of gloom you are trying to express.
- Ive also spent a while puzzling over the look of the woman in pages five and six. I keep thinking that she looks like a different woman and I believe its down to the size of the eye brows (but I could be wrong). She certainly, to me, looks younger in the top panel of page five than she does in page six.
Story and flow wise, while I kind of agree with you about the page sizes and the speed of the narrative, I think it only slows down in page seven. Two thoughts about that page:
- The policeman saying What the hell are you meant to be?! seems a little out of place as I was confused as to where (or what) Dr D was.
- Could you drop in another picture in the top section showing Dr D doing something at the crime scene. This would increase the pacing and make the policemans comments more in keeping with the actions. It might even need the bottom pane moving on to the next page and a few more images of Dr D doing something adding in to this page. (Sorry if Im vague, but obviously Im trying to guess on what happens next with the story, so Im unsure if my suggestions would fit.)
Overall, bloomin good and do keep it up.
Astounding work. Keep it up, and don't keep us waiting!
thanks everyone who is looking - i was beginning to think my little post was totally ignored
here's the next page, as the doctor begins his investigations
page eight
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next page.
now, i've gone for a more styised approach on this page, which i like at the moment, but can see that i may hate tomorrow, so opinions welcome, as always
page nine
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no more posts here from me on this strip i think. it's begun to feel a little too mastabatory, so while i'll continue to draw it, it's probably best if i keep it private.
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Mate it's fantastic so far! I want to see where it's going!
page ten
page eleven
page twelve
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Hurrah! It's looking good Doc
I am the Blaster, I have filled the role of Tank, Controller and Defender
Sometimes all at once.
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Beaut!
Say, you're lucky to have claimed the name Redlight too!
Daredevil type?
Some really nice shading and your form is great.
Page six i would like to so more action in panel 1 and 2.
The victim is great but the assailant could use more power.
On panel 2 more emphasis on the eyes flaring up.
Great work gonna add you to my watch list after i cleared it up a bit.
thanks for reading!
redlight's not mine, i'm borrowing him for this story as his MO fitted. he's a cross between daredevil and captain america i guess
the eye flare is actually something i dithered about for a while before adding, but i decided it would be too subtle without something. the victim and the assailant were drawn that way for a reason, which should, i hope, become clearer
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next page...
page thirteen
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i liked this page when i sketched it, when i drew it and when i coloured it in, but am not so sure now...
page fifteen
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I like the way this is going (Im just playing catch-up so have read a load of pages) and while I do like page fifteen, IMO it needs an additional shot to show who were still looking at. I know that is kind of on the previous page and maybe its just because Im reading them as individual pages, but page fourteen doesnt have any conversation from Dr D and his hands are together rather than cupping something so the narrative seems to get a bit blurry.
Keep it coming. Really enjoying this strip.
This is brilliant! I loved the early narratitive of Dr D's beginnings in paragon, wish I was able to produce something of this standard.
following on from this:
sketch one
and this:
sketch two
here follows a more involved look at the doctor's origins, or at least his beginnings in paragon.
as a character, his look is not yet set in stone, and i'll be looking to develop it as the strip continues. and suggestions would be more than welcome, as all fresh perspectives are good...
doctor destiny, origins, page one
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