I liked it. Contrary to your belief that it's too long, I did find it lacking. Don't get me wrong, you've got a tight story there, but I would have enjoyed some history on Force's team, too.
All in all, an enjoyable piece, and definately one where you can feel the tension during the present-time frame, set against the narrative of the flashbacks. I just wish there would have been more of it.
Thank you FG. I wouldn't have minded including more background for the others but things evolved quite a bit in the writing and in the end I couldn't find the 'right' place for it in the flow of the story. (The plot point about gaining entry to the warehouse got a bit lost along the way too.)
Still, they do say "always leave 'em wanting more" 
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"If there's anything worse than being sacrificed, it's being sacrificed incompetantly."
In celebration of Force's 50, I thought I'd share a little something I've been working on for a while. It's a bit long to just post on the forum, so here's a link to an rtf version:
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Clicky (Here's hoping I've got it working right this time
"If there's anything worse than being sacrificed, it's being sacrificed incompetantly."