Well, I read your bio on Hero Corps and was pretty impressed with what I found. From what I can tell, your character wants to be powerful in order to show her two patrons that she can be as good as they are. Which is different than the Lord Recluse conected bios.
The only quibble I have is that Black Scorpion wouldn't teach Laureth on his own. He doesn't understand how his battle suit works, all the crap loads of scientists and technicians do. Or maybe just an inner circle of scientists, I don't know exactly. He would definately oversee her training personally but the actual work would probably be done by some cronies.
To expand your bio, I'd suggest giving a little more info about who Laureth used to be and perhaps how well her revenge has been going. That's about all I can think of right now; hope I helped some.
Statesman said let there be heroes, and there were heroes.
Lord Recluse said let there be villains, and there were villains.
NCsoft said let there be nothing, and there was nothing.
Hm... yeah, I definitely see your point. Didn't think of that. XD
The bio is currently changed. I hope this works out a lot better. Critiques on costumes to fit the bio better would be nice.
Heard this was the best place to post this.
In any case, I need help with my character biography in terms of accuracy and originality.
Here is the current info and pictures:
Character Bio
Picture No. 1 <-- Original Shot
Picture No. 2 <-- Action Shot
Picture No. 3 <-- Alternate Costume
Picture No. 4 <-- Another Alternate Costume
I'm essentially going for a character that is aligned with Arachnos, but yet is NOT one of those "I'm gonna kill Recluse and take over!" characters, or worse, one of the "I'm Recluse's Right Hand!" wannabies. >_>;;
Any and all suggestions/critiques are welcome.