the one grand paragraph made it somewhat difficult to follow...damn my dislexia...It also didn't help that there were strange codes within some of the words. not sure what they were there for, but it broke the flow. perhaps do some touchups and break up the paragraph?
Summer Heat
that code is supposed to be apostrophes. they didnt work out when i posted
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seem to work fine for me... Are you serious that CuppaJo told you to write all of these?
Did you copy this story out of a Word document? Sometimes Word will replace apostrophes and quotation marks with curved "smart quotes" rather than the regular straight quotes.
Smart quotes aren't ASCII recognized characters, so they'll appear as the garble of symbols in a format that requires ASCII, like this forum's text boxes.
I have two suggestions. Either go to Autocorrect Options under the Tools menu in Word, uncheck the "smart quotes" box in the Autoformat as You Type box, then re-save your story (I'd recommend doing this if you plan on posting more stories to the forums). You could also copy your story to Notepad before pasting it to the forum box.
Hope this helps.
Imagine. It’s nightfall. Everyone has gone home but you. You finally leave your office at Hotel Geneva and head for home. While your back is turned some Freakshow pop out of no where and start attacking you. You scream and scream but no one comes. Then, out of the night you see a phantom coming toward you. Then another. The you see a whole phantom army attacking the Freakshow. You are lying on the ground afraid to look up for you think it is a Carnie group. When you finally look up you see the face of Mesmorizer. You thank him for his duty and run along merrily home to your wife and kids. This is not a scene that would have happened a few years back.
Brett Rushing loved to do bad things. He was one of those “bad seeds” that didn’t get anything for Christmas ever. He joined the Hellions at an age of 13, the youngest member to ever be picked to join. He never liked fire and knew it wasn’t his kind of place so when he got to be 14 he left the Hellions to join the Outcasts. You never fit in with the Outcasts because you had no powers so he decided to join the Trolls just a few days after joining the Outcasts. This is where he got his green body. He figured out how to revert back to normal and quit the Trolls but a little bit of green is still in him. When he was 20 he joined Crey and they taught him how to heal. He was the only Medic boss. When he got tired of Crey the Carnies asked him to join them in their quest for world domination. When he said okay, the world was doomed. He was their main Illusionist. He learned all about phantoms and spectral things. When he went off on his own he destroyed. All villain groups feared him. He was his own villain group. The Mesmorizations. They were the deadliest crew ever to hit Paragon City. When the main Heroes found out about this(you call them the Devs) they attacked. But in the end, they were too weak. But one hero was sick with the flu that day and didn’t go help fight the nemesis of a problem. CuppaJo was in her bed that morning and she flipped on the news. She saw what was going on and teleported herself to an unknown island off the coast of “Dark” Astoria. She gathered everyone there. Every hero ever know was ready to fight. As the Mesmorizations were destroying Eastgate, they were making a plan. Overbrook became Faultline that day. Eastgate became the Hollows(yeah I know you thought it was the Trolls but it wasn’t). The heroes had their plan. Cuppa rounded them all up on a team and teleported everyone to Atlas Park. Within a matter of day Atlas Park was the first place to be liberated from the Mesmorizations. Nothing but rubble was left. As people started rebuilding Atlas, they struck in Galaxy City. A month later it was the second place to be liberated. Kings Row was liberated a few days later and so was Eastgate. It was in total destruction and there was no way of fixing it. The next place they liberated was Steel Canyon. It was a tough battle but they did it. Heroes who had been level 1 before this were already up to level 29. More and more heroes kept getting out of bed to help with the threat. When Skyway City and Overbrook were liberated, Mesmorizer sent reinforcements to the next target of the heroes. Independence Port, the biggest of all the places fell after a year of fighting. A few months later, Crey’s Folly and Brickstown were liberated meaning that Mesmorist would have a place to go instead of being killed and thrown off the side of the big fault in Faultline. When they liberated Talos Island it was over. They easily took Founders’ Falls and “Eden”. Perigrine Island was taken a day later and Mesmorizer was sentenced to death.
While waiting on death row a Sunday School teacher named David Smith came and talked to him. He helped him get his life back on track. Mesmorizer cried a river when they put down the death trial and put him to life in prison. He was one of the happiest men on Earth. By experiencing the grace of God he was able to make his life better. When they lowered his punishment down to ten years in prison he began a ritual. His ritual was to go to church each Sunday and learn about the will of God. When Mesmorizer was released he became a hero. The Devs that were defeated are known to have made the group the Pratorians. He is now level 31 as a hero and loves his job. But don’t make a mistake and give the world a death wish. You’ll never know when Mesmorizer will strike terror into the eyes of young ones ever again.