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Check out one of my most recent arcs:
457506 - A Very Special Episode - An abandoned TV, a missing kid's TV show host and more
416951 - The Ms. Manners Task Force - More wacky villains, Wannabes. things in poor taste
or one of my other arcs including two 2010 Player's Choice Winners and an2009 Official AE Awards Nominee for Best Original Story
It is a good arc and it was a pleasure to play.
About the vigilante thing. It would have been nice if we could have opted not to finish the mission that way, but to refuse to blow up innocents. Perhaps you could tweak it in such a way that people can 'fail' here?
For example you can have them finish the mission with setting a timer. Or alternatively they can fail by destroying the explosives.
In that way it will be a morality choice and the arc can remain heroic. However the heroes can be on a sliding scale when they opt to finish things up permanently.
Thanks for the kind words and the really good feedback. Its great to get. It does seem that the bombs were the most non heroic thing there.
The bombs are really more of the "employers" modus operandi than anything. It is not really critical to the story as much as it is there to show off her ruthlessness and cause you to remain unsure of your moral support. But maybe, considering that she knows she's working with a hero, she would not push for that.
I love the idea of the moral dilemma, and allowing failure, but really am not sure how to pull that off mechanically and let people continue. (If only I could have different responses from the contact based on what you did in mission.)
I worked from the premise that blowing up the freakshop after arresting everyone would be ok as "innocents" are safe once you cleared it out.
Will have to noodle on this a bit, because I can see, from multiple feedback, how unsettling it was to heroes... As was working for this employer, but that hopefully is mitigated by the fact she does notmlike who she is...
Anyway--skirting spoilers makes it hard to be detailed.
Great feedback though, thanks!
I also have a few changes to make to the bosses at the end of mission 2 and 3 which will warrant a change to the allies and bit more play testing.
I would prefer it was heroic though, so I will be thinking hard about the right balance here--thanks again!
Try out my AE Arcs! (solo friendly, canon related, & some contest winners)
| #529832 Rularularian - Heroic - 41-54 | #515140 The Serpent Beyond the Horizon - Heroic - 46-52 | #183832 Save the Diver, Save the World - Vigilante - 25-30 | #245534 Condemning Croatoa - Villainous - 25-33 | #540585 Robolution - Villainous - 25-34 |
Wow! I realize now that most of the feedback is coming from the AE Storyteam. Thanks for the rating of best overall! That's an incredible honor and inspires me to continue refining my arc.
I made some very significant changes last night to improve the experience; updating the bosses in missions 2 and 3. They never sat quite right with me as they were, and I think the story is stronger for the change.
I also added a tiny bit of depth to the custom descriptions and introduced the Virtea race into arc. (Virtea--that's some really obscure canon content for ya! Though I am not wholly satisfied with them yet, I think they are a nice addition.)
I have not handled the bomb issue yet--I think I may just remove the bombs altogether though since it was such a common complaint as being uncharacteristic of heroes--and I do fundamentally prefer this being heroic--as saving the world can outweigh a lot.
Try out my AE Arcs! (solo friendly, canon related, & some contest winners)
| #529832 Rularularian - Heroic - 41-54 | #515140 The Serpent Beyond the Horizon - Heroic - 46-52 | #183832 Save the Diver, Save the World - Vigilante - 25-30 | #245534 Condemning Croatoa - Villainous - 25-33 | #540585 Robolution - Villainous - 25-34 |
I just logged on after being away for a week, and was thrilled to find several tells giving me feedback about my "Save the Diver" arc. Thanks all who played it! I was thrilled to get the feedback!
I appreciate you taking the time to give me your thoughts and will try to improve the arc based on your input.
i'll also try to get to those typos--but copy-editing yourself is rough--wish there was a spell checker in this thing...
Edit: (Oh and I have changed it to vigilante because so many felt it a bit grayer than heroic--when I first conceived of it, that category not exist.)
Try out my AE Arcs! (solo friendly, canon related, & some contest winners)
| #529832 Rularularian - Heroic - 41-54 | #515140 The Serpent Beyond the Horizon - Heroic - 46-52 | #183832 Save the Diver, Save the World - Vigilante - 25-30 | #245534 Condemning Croatoa - Villainous - 25-33 | #540585 Robolution - Villainous - 25-34 |