Really enjoyed it!
I won't be specific here about the story so as to leave no spoilers in my wake.
The main thing is that it was well written and fun to play. I really liked the use of the Orange text to bring additional life to my contact. I also thought the use of her astral projection to allow her to be in two places at once was really creative.
Incidentally, you used the pop-ups well. I tend to avoid them, but thought you used them to good effect.
I noticed a small omission in one of them, I think in the end of mission 3? Something like Jander is man instead of Jander is the man--sorry I didn't take better notes. I also thought the titles could use something to separate them--color maybe or at least regular Init Caps. But that is all trivial stuff.
Overall it was great fun! 5 stars
Try out my AE Arcs! (solo friendly, canon related, & some contest winners)
| #529832 Rularularian - Heroic - 41-54 | #515140 The Serpent Beyond the Horizon - Heroic - 46-52 | #183832 Save the Diver, Save the World - Vigilante - 25-30 | #245534 Condemning Croatoa - Villainous - 25-33 | #540585 Robolution - Villainous - 25-34 |
Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
I have made the changes you suggested, and am pleased with the results.
I'm looking forward in trying out your arcs this week.
I'm finally done with the bulk of my reworked arc (it was originally titled A Silent Death). I published it today under a new title. If you have time, could you please run through it and give me your thoughts?
Thanks.
508100 (Kansas Anymore by @azure lightstar)