Needs work on the mission text. You tend to have sentences run on too long without a comma or full stop to break them up. You should also try speaking out loud what you have people saying, I think you’ll find it sounds stilted and unnatural.
Example:
Well there seems to be a disturbance in my town there has been a rather large increase in criminal activity in my town as of late.
You need to either break this into two sentences
Well there seems to be a disturbance in my town. There has been a rather large increase in criminal activity {in my town} as of late.
Or
Well there seems to be a disturbance in my town, there has been a rather large increase in criminal activity {in my town} as of late.
In both cases you should remove the redundant in my town bit.
Using different fonts and colours can make your mission descriptions much more interesting to read (when you’re editing just right click and select them)
Try using the mission pop ups as you enter a map. It’s not essential but it's one of the simplest and easiest tools for setting the scene.
Plot: Is this meant to be set in the past? If so then you need something to indicate that in the opening mission text (something as simple as "It’s the year 1234AD and the sun is just setting over your simple town as you arrive to meet your good friend Ivan". Also try using maps that don't have glaring anachronisms like war walls. However I accept that sometimes you have no choice due to the limitations of the game maps.
Rouge knights are not what you think they are. Perhaps you meant rogue knights? And in the second mission did I really need to find a clue that “someone come in the cave?” Eww. Maybe work on that one abit.
I’m afraid I didn’t play past the second mission. I rated it 2 stars.
Thank you I will take that in to consideration =)
Hey all I just published my main character's origin story to the MA system and I am now looking for feedback I would really appreciate any feedback at all. Story is based in Medieval Times, and as you play through read the clues often to follow the story. =) Arc#418381 Thank you very much for any and all feedback.