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A Penny For Your Thoughts #348691 <- Dev's Choice'd by Dr. Aeon!
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Hey there!
This was great for a first story. There's a definite focus on story telling. Villain stories are inherently hard to write, whem even the old Mills and Boon love story crutch can too easily becomes too tainted to for the player to care. Why should a villain 'care'?
On the other hand, you've written quite a good story of villainous, senseless slaughter that escalates into something more important. Unfortunately I didn't get to the end, once the incessant ambushes beat up my ally, I was toast in the last mission. So I only got a sense of the climax, but did not see it. In the end, I did not feel proud of my villainy. I think the finale might be crucial to that.
I've PM'ed you a pile of notes about little things too, hopefully some of them are useful.
Cheers, airhead
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Cheers your feedback was awesome. I've made loads of small changes in response and I think its good to go now.
Just finished my first story using the Architect system. I’ve been away from CoH for several years and only came back a few days ago. I really like the changes. The Architect system is a load of fun.
Anyway it took me three days and I think it’s good to go. I would love some feedback, especially if you notice any typos.
The arc is called Die Eckleman Die!
Id: 416656
Basically it's a villainous parallel earth hoping scifi story.
P.S. Hope this ok to just create a thread to advertise this. Not sure what the acceptable protocol is.
EDIT: So I somehow messed things up so I had to republish it - old id has been replaced with the new one