Looking for some MA Feedback help from my Virtue peeps - Arc 345863 When The Bough Breaks


PsychoPez

 

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Heya Virtue. I created my first MA arc (Info can be found here) and I'm looking for feedback. Spelling, grammar, as well as just how it handles overall from a story POV.

And I know a few of you here are interested in story telling and role playing... I'm looking for any sort of feedback, good or bad.

It's designed for Dr. Aeon's contest, so hopefully it will be a little What The Hell, Hero feel to it.


Arc #345863 - When The Bough Breaks
"Curse you Perry the Plata...wait, is that Love Handel?" - Dr. Heinz Doofenshmirtz, Phineas and Ferb