((Paragraphs are your friend. So are fullstops 
Edit: Sorry, forgot I was in the RP forum. I'm not used to being here))
[this will be an open RP so post or you can read and see what happens]
"Damn it" Bomber roared slamming his fist down on table and quickly turning off the TV "Why was i so stupid? i could have easily took down those robots" he sighed "but i had to keep my power below average i was near alot of civillains if i had used more of my power innocents would have been hurt" he shook his head removeing his mask and getting dressed into his casual clothes he had never really had a secret identity just no one asked him it did come in handy thought when he wanted to go in hideing, Bomber yawned sitting down and putting in a DvD into his DvD player he'd been meaning to watch the movie for awhile but hero work had stopped him haveing any free time "This better be a good movie i need something entertaining while i let off some steam" he cursed turning on the DvD and beging to watch his movie, thought suddenly there was a knock at the door.
[now you can be a hero comeing to say Hi and make Bomber feel better, incase you already know him from GG or you could a normal civillain maybe a niegbour or something]
((Well firstly, pieces where constructive criticism are desired usually go in Creative, instead of Roleplaying.
Firstly, I noticed you used the term 'higher level heroes', which implies game mechanics. 'Stronger', 'more experienced' and other such terms are better.
Secondly, it lacks a lot of punctuation, it's mostly just a stream of text. Some formatting and breaking it up into paragraphs would make it much easier on the eyes to read, with clear breaks.
Once that is done, you can work on maybe adding a little more description and minor details to flesh it out, but like with everything, excess can be a bad thing.))
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((Well firstly, pieces where constructive criticism are desired usually go in Creative, instead of Roleplaying.
Firstly, I noticed you used the term 'higher level heroes', which implies game mechanics. 'Stronger', 'more experienced' and other such terms are better.
Secondly, it lacks a lot of punctuation, it's mostly just a stream of text. Some formatting and breaking it up into paragraphs would make it much easier on the eyes to read, with clear breaks.
Once that is done, you can work on maybe adding a little more description and minor details to flesh it out, but like with everything, excess can be a bad thing.))
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[I'm amazeingly bad at spelling,gramma, and paragraphs ><]
Kings row was awkwardly quiet until 10:05pm when a massive explosion was heard hordes of news crews rushed towards the scene to find Inferno bomber the mutant with fire blasting and ice control powers fighting a large group of clockworks the sight was enough to make people want to rush in and help but everyone was helpless, Bomber was being rampaged by lighting bolts from the clockworks he was also being beaten by the robots repeatedly desperately trying to fight them off wielding his ice sword and blasting fireballs in any direction trying to fight back the rusting monsters,10 minutes later and a small group of higher level heroes appeared on the scene making quick work of the clockworks and rescuing Bomber, Bomber was left humiliated and guilty for not being able to handle a large group of pint sized robots, all the reporters where firing questions at him as the heroes rushed him to hospital, later on it was the main news in the paper and Bomber avoided large groups of civilians in case he would be the new joke on Paragons streets.
[rate please >:3]