Drat. Just spent 2 hours reading and getting no work done.
Still at least its well worth reading. Cheers Jakey and the rest of you HONU folks 
Just read the first part and I have to say it's bloody hilarious. Brilliant! I laughed out loud a few times which in itself is a tad hazardous seeing I'm sitting behind a service desk. I'll definitely be reading more!
One side point: I know that one should not put extra empty lines between paragraphs while writing (in fact the instructor of your creative writing class can bite your head off for that) but with online forum posts it might make the text more readable for some. If the whole text appears to be one large chunk it can deter some people from reading it. Dunno how big a problem that is in general, so it's just a point of view to be considered.
I do see your point. My habit is to indent paragraphs, but forum posts love to left block them, so it's a huge annoyance. I use space between paragraphs to show a scene change, but your point is well taken. Possibly something I can experiment with.
Don't ask me about joining Honourable United, I'm lazy. Ask Captain Cathode.
http://www.onthejazz.co.uk/honu/
"If I had a punch, I would so hit that guy." - Millenium (because drinking nail varnish remover is for real men)
On the Honourable Forum, it's in the Completed Works section, rather than the Creative section.
There are some great stories there by other members, there's even a recommended reading list to help build up a narrative sequence.
Don't ask me about joining Honourable United, I'm lazy. Ask Captain Cathode.
http://www.onthejazz.co.uk/honu/
"If I had a punch, I would so hit that guy." - Millenium (because drinking nail varnish remover is for real men)