That's looking pretty good. I would say the foreshortning on the legs is a little too much. The left should be smaller or the right bigger. Also the positioning of the legs looks off. The right is twisted out too far and could be rotated in a tad. Maybe the left could be tweaked a bit too. The way it curves in at the end gives the impression the inner groin is kinda round. Maybe less curve on the left thigh? I don't know. Better than I could do. Hopefully some folks who can draw will weigh in.
Good Luck!
might want to give her more neck
Liberty
My 50s:
Hero: Armor Assassin (scrapper), Cross Dresser (scrapper), Surly Seaman (blaster), Defensive End (Tank), Rad Rhino (Cont)
Villain: Beast Infection (Corr), Sweet Zombie Jesus (MM), Milk Weasel (Stalker), Orgullo (MM), Agent Eris (Crab)
You kind of cracked the spine, with the pelvis (groin area facing west, and the chest & shoulders facing east) I'd watch the width of the lower thigh on the closer leg, don't think it needs to be so "dangly", also the top of the thigh on that leg is suggesting more roundness, slant it down a touch... and yes, pull the sword arm down and out of her chin, and show the neck and traps.
Hope this helps
i typically over exaggerate certain poses. i find that (for myself that is) i try to draw with a "cone" like effect for foreshortening. you should also watch your lines. for added depth, anything closer to the viewer you should have solid thick lines. the further away the thinner the lines should get.
good luck!
OK - you guys are great! Seems like it's been hard to get concise and quick critique other places and these responses were so fast and helpful!... and visual stuff too - thanks a bunch Alex.
Tricky thanks for reminding me about line width. I was leaving that for the ink, which I like doing with a brush - but I tend to get all involved with individual lines and forget the whole when I do that too.
I'm calling this one done. There's definately still some things to improve, but I feel like I made good progress thanks to the crits I got here. The exaggerated foreshortening grew on me so I left it that way, didn't feel like it detracted too terribly much and made the process fun.
That came out nice!
I hope I'm OK to post requests for artistic advice here like this - gotta say I got one of the best crits I've had in a while anywhere from these boards recently. This is my second attempt at getting something finished using my main CoX char. as subject matter.
Having fun with the foreshortening here despite frustrations. Things looked OK until I started putting in some of the armor details in on the legs which amplified my mistakes/mishandling of the hips here. My suspicion is I'll run into similar problems with the arms when I get there if I don't fix the base pose first. Brought this in to the computer (amazing how that makes things look like you're looking at it through a totally different set of eyes?) to try and tweak some things so I wouldn't tear up my paper with erasing, and I'm still spinning wheels despite checking references and anatomy books - my brain appears to be in a lock. Any suggestions? Something is telling me maybe I need to just simplify all the armor details too, especially on the top (kicks self for creating main needing steampunk armors).
Betty Clocker WIP