I want you guys to tell me if you think i should keep writing, or hand the idea over to a better writer. This just a rough first chapter.
Chapter 1
June 17, 2:34 A.M.
The Chief of Paragons finest was putting his coat on, after a long day of work. He wasnt looking forward to going home and only having a 3-hour sleep. A policemans work was never done. His name was Finnegan, and he was a happy guy. He loved paragon for the helpful company of the heroes. But while he was heading for his car, he saw a mysterious figure. Finnegan had dealt with many of these punks before. He pulled out his gun.
Listen buddy, you picked the wrong night! Finnegan yelled. The mysterious figure chuckled lightly.
Oooh Finny, hehe, you were always such a tough guy. Thats why I chose you.
What? Who are you?
Oh you know me, you let get tortured by those freaks, while you and your donut gobbling minions wrote speeding tickets, letting those goody-two-shoes heroes do all the REAL police work!!
Is that you? Hertz! You should be at home! Whats wrong with your skin? Finnegan could see the figure close up now, in full light. He looked like he was terribly burnt with gray skin. He was only wearing a hood to hide his disfigured face.
Yep! Its me! In whats left of my flesh!! Those freaks did this to me, I couldve ended the pain, but those heroes couldnt bear not to have their precious TV time! Oh, Im better now; Im more powerful than I ever was! Hell I even learned a few new tricks. The Figure grabbed Finnegan by the sides of his head with both hands.
Oh, by the way, its not Hertz anymore . Ive become, The Newt!! Newts fingers started to become slimmer and started to tunnel into Finnegans ears. Then Newts arms tunneled in. Until Newts body had gruesomely split into two parts, which tunneled into corresponding ears. Finnegan remained still for at least 10 minutes. Then, he made a twitch, and looked at his hands. Finnegan had became possessed by Newt. Newts first phase was complete.
I want you guys to tell me if you think i should keep writing, or hand the idea over to a better writer. This just a rough first chapter.
Chapter 1
June 17, 2:34 A.M.
The Chief of Paragons finest was putting his coat on, after a long day of work. He wasnt looking forward to going home and only having a 3-hour sleep. A policemans work was never done. His name was Finnegan, and he was a happy guy. He loved paragon for the helpful company of the heroes. But while he was heading for his car, he saw a mysterious figure. Finnegan had dealt with many of these punks before. He pulled out his gun.
Listen buddy, you picked the wrong night! Finnegan yelled. The mysterious figure chuckled lightly.
Oooh Finny, hehe, you were always such a tough guy. Thats why I chose you.
What? Who are you?
Oh you know me, you let get tortured by those freaks, while you and your donut gobbling minions wrote speeding tickets, letting those goody-two-shoes heroes do all the REAL police work!!
Is that you? Hertz! You should be at home! Whats wrong with your skin? Finnegan could see the figure close up now, in full light. He looked like he was terribly burnt with gray skin. He was only wearing a hood to hide his disfigured face.
Yep! Its me! In whats left of my flesh!! Those freaks did this to me, I couldve ended the pain, but those heroes couldnt bear not to have their precious TV time! Oh, Im better now; Im more powerful than I ever was! Hell I even learned a few new tricks. The Figure grabbed Finnegan by the sides of his head with both hands.
Oh, by the way, its not Hertz anymore . Ive become, The Newt!! Newts fingers started to become slimmer and started to tunnel into Finnegans ears. Then Newts arms tunneled in. Until Newts body had gruesomely split into two parts, which tunneled into corresponding ears. Finnegan remained still for at least 10 minutes. Then, he made a twitch, and looked at his hands. Finnegan had became possessed by Newt. Newts first phase was complete.