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Number - 84107
Title - Changing Leaves
Contact - Countess Crey's Bodyguard
Alignment - Heroic
Length - 3 missions, no kill-alls
Mission 1 - Blinkies required, 1 hostage rescue required, with option to fight a very tough AV (for those that want the challenge)
Mission 2 - Free Hostage
Mission 3 - Escort
Description - Countess Crey's personal Bodyguard has contacted you because a remote Crey team has stopped checking in. Normally you wouldn't care about Crey, but the team was trying to stop a powerful creature that's been hurting a lot of innocent people. Saving people is your motivation, but is that all Crey Industries cares about?
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Mission One
Could use a little bit more fleshing out - comments from the hostage and his captors, something in the activation bar when using the glowies.
Need to edit the Navigation Text (Singular) for the collection, so that when one device is left the compass text isn't just "device".
Typo - hostage rescue, "protectove" instead of "protective".
Typo - mission turn in, final line, "you're" instead of "your"
Mission Two
Typo - mission intro, last paragraph, "setup" instead of "set up"
Mission Three
More fleshing out could be done, primarily with the captive and the captors.
At the end, Father Root said to take one of his leaves. I presume this was an indication that you'd be giving a souvenir, but none was given.
Overall
Excellent, creative story. Nice and appropriate usage of colored text. Easily 4 stars off the strength of the story. Possible 5 after it's fully fleshed out and typos are wacked.
Arc Name: Tangled Webs and Reflecting Mirrors: Part One - The Deal
Arc ID: 133330
Creator Global: @Rodric
Difficulty: Medium - AV/EB present
Length: 1 hour, 5 missions
-Kill All
-Release Captive
-Kill All
-Collection
-Kill Bosses
