I just read this and was so impressed I had to comment.
That was brilliant! I did have to read it twice to get the speakers straight, (thanks for the pink and blue) regarding their alignments and better grasp of the pre-plot. But I figure that is no fault of yours.
I have to ask: Did you plan the symbolism of the statement "Its hot in here" or is it a happy coincidence? I read it as the knowledge the woman has. She has already figured out the situation and knows their roles should be reversed. The conversation is just to "Catch the guy up to speed" before one of them dies. (A conculsion that seems to me to be inevitable.) Thus the guy echoes "Its hot in here" once he fully understands the truth...
I'd appreciate any insights. again great piece.
