Mna_Grok

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  1. Hey. I just read your background, and it looks good. A couple of points struck me.

    The switch from Patrick to Tyger is kinda quick. If someone is skimming it might go by. Maybe have a sentance or two when he meets the doctor saying something about how his friends call him Tyger, and which would he prefer?

    Also, when he is being attacked by Dane, it seems to me that Dane goes too quickly from anger to rage. Maybe add in a couple of lines where Dane gets angry and starts swinging harder yet continues to miss. maybe one of his friends takes a swing or two and that misses as well. Then, Dane gets to rage and pulls out the gun.

    Marcel
  2. I am looking for some help in fleshing out the backstory on my energy/energy blaster that I have started. The powers I pick as he levels up are going to be based on this backstory.

    He hasn't said much about how he came to be here in Paragon City other than that it was a scientific experiment gone horribly wrong. All that is known is that he appeared shortly after the finish of the war with the Ricti. He has very few close friends, feeling very alone.

    It is known that he comes from a very different plane of existance. The beings from his planet have evolved with the ability to be able to slowly absorb background energy and release it in controlled bursts. Physical violence is very uncommon there. However, contests of skill involving the release of energy at distant targets are very common. In emergencies, they also have the ability to focus the energy in their extremities.

    Since coming to this world he has been at times startled, shocked and dismayed at the way the heroes of the world at times ignore the crime on the street. He has also been impressed with the way citizens, despite the crime and violence, go about their ordinary lives. Inspired, he is determined to help them, and has found ways to use the skills picked up in contests on his home planet to help here.


    Anyways, here is his build as I have mapped so far. I am only up to level 4, so there is still a lot of room to play. I think that I have managed to keep the build somewhat within my self-imposed limits of the backstory.

    Suggestions/questions/comments??

    Slot[01] Level 1 (Starting Primary) : Power Blast
    Slot[02] Level 1 (Starting Secondary) : Power Thrust
    Slot[03] Level 2 : Power Bolt
    Slot[04] Level 4 : Build Up
    Slot[05] Level 6 : Hasten
    Slot[06] Level 8 : Sniper Blast
    Slot[07] Level 10 : Stealth
    Slot[08] Level 12 : Aim
    Slot[09] Level 14 : Super Speed
    Slot[10] Level 16 : Conserve Power
    Slot[11] Level 18 : Power Push
    Slot[12] Level 20 : Invisibility
    Slot[13] Level 22 : Phase Shift

    Marcel