Okay, I'm an honest writer (as in I write books). In TargetDummy's ramble, I noticed just a few things he had absolutely wrong that really should be looked at...
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That's called omniscient (all knowing) narration. The author narrates mentioning what this or that character may be feeling anytime the author pleases.
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Omniscient by definition does indeed mean all-knowing, therefore, there is absolutely no reason why he should not know the exact heights/lengths of things or exact thoughts of characters.
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The trouble with using omniscient narration is that all the characters are kept at arms length. This tends to make the story less exciting to any reader since they never become involved with the characters.
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Not true. It depends on just how you write it.
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A much better choice here would be first person viewpoint from Kel Nen's perspective and all in the present tense.
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First person is good and all, but maybe not present. Present tense is very difficult to write good, and even first person can be a little challenging because of the limited viewpoint.
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Measurements such as the ten foot tall beast, the six foot shaft, and the five hundred pounds of the beast seem out of place in their detail. Is Kel Nen carrying a ruler? Perhaps you may want to drop the specific references and go with more subject ones.
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Footage is a very easily mentally measured length. Not difficult at all, and if one tries, one may even be able to get it down to half-feet. I could ramble about this, but I have to go.
Later
