The Serpent beyond the Horizon - Feedback wanted!

I have just wrapped up my first (solid) draft of a new arc, The Serpent Beyond the Horizon, and would love feedback if anyone wants to take it for a spin.

As with my other arcs, it's canon inspired and tries to focus on some things that I that grab me as overlooked hooks in the canon. This one focuses on the Snakes, starts in the Cimeroran time, but little takes place in Cimerora proper. I have run through it several times, and will several more, but I always overlook stuff, so outside eyes are most welcome, as is feedback of all types.

Title: The Serpent Beyond the Horizon
Arc ID: 515140
Keywords: Solo Friendly, Canon Related, Magic
Length: Very Long
Morality: Vigilante (maybe heroic would work better really)
Enemies: Egyptians, Snakes, Arachnos, Cimeroran Traitors, Mu
Allies: Midnight Squad, Cimerorans
Description: Humphrey Basingwaithe of the Midnight Squad believes he knows where the Mercy Island Snakes come from. Travel back to Cimerora to help him test his theory! (SFMA - This story has been designed to be soloed with the provided allies.)

In addition to general story feedback, customs feedback, and inevitable typos, I'd love thoughts about the main ally. Trying to balance an ally that helps you take on Archvillains is always tricky. I think I have it handled here--he seems sturdy--but would appreciate any feedback about that balance as well.

Enjoy!

I am sure I will be tweaking this regularly over the next few weeks--and look forward to any help or insights I can get! Thanks in advance!

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Try out my AE Arcs! (solo friendly, canon related, & some contest winners)
| #529832 Rularularian - Heroic - 41-54 | #515140 The Serpent Beyond the Horizon - Heroic - 46-52 | #183832 Save the Diver, Save the World - Vigilante - 25-30 | #245534 Condemning Croatoa - Villainous - 25-33 | #540585 Robolution - Villainous - 25-34 |

Well, as it turns out, I am either further along than I thought or just ready to move on.

Still eagerly looking for feedback, but no more tweaking for now. Though there is inevitably some detail somewhere I overlooked or that will change, anything now will just be minor details based on others feedback.

I hope the few that will play it find it fun! Enjoy!

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Try out my AE Arcs! (solo friendly, canon related, & some contest winners)
| #529832 Rularularian - Heroic - 41-54 | #515140 The Serpent Beyond the Horizon - Heroic - 46-52 | #183832 Save the Diver, Save the World - Vigilante - 25-30 | #245534 Condemning Croatoa - Villainous - 25-33 | #540585 Robolution - Villainous - 25-34 |