So has anyone tried this arc to provide some feedback for me?
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I was gonna give this a shot when I found the time, just been busy lately. :-)
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Ok, ran this and here's some comments on the arc:
Mission One:
Big Block of Text is hard to read.
Kill-alls are bad... especially on CoT maps, lots of nooks and crannies for one bad guy to hide in.
Mission Two:
Some grammar errors in introduction text, missing commas ect.
This boss is annoying to fight, his resists to certain damage is ridiculous.
The Ambush was.... different... but killing the player just for the story may anger some people.
Mission Three:
The 'Accept' default for missions doesn't fit very well, might want to edit this text. (applies to all missions)
"share a floating position" line is just...odd.
Mu dialog is a little flat, sounds the same as the ambush in the last mission.
The enemy group needs some variety, All-Mu means All End-drain. Not very fun. You can add some guys working for the mu to the mix without impacting the story.
'Ritual' instead of 'Spell' would sound better in the return dialog.
Mission Four:
Good map choice here.
Hequats dialog is eh. Give it some more punch, fix the grammar.
Ughh... Defeat-alls are bad. Surprise Defeat-all for no reason is worse. Against Mu and it leaves a bad taste in my mouth.
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Mission Four:
Good map choice here. Hequats dialog is eh. Give it some more punch, fix the grammar. Ughh... Defeat-alls are bad. Surprise Defeat-all for no reason is worse. Against Mu and it leaves a bad taste in my mouth. |
I didn't want to change her too much 
(see quotes section)http://wiki.cohtitan.com/wiki/Hequat
In regards to kill alls I figured that in small maps it wouldn't be much issue.
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Mission Three:
The 'Accept' default for missions doesn't fit very well, might want to edit this text. (applies to all missions) "share a floating position" line is just...odd. Mu dialog is a little flat, sounds the same as the ambush in the last mission. The enemy group needs some variety, All-Mu means All End-drain. Not very fun. You can add some guys working for the mu to the mix without impacting the story. 'Ritual' instead of 'Spell' would sound better in the return dialog. |
Note* this story was to spin off of Hequats story in the CoH lore. (see the wiki link under her picture in the OP) So I was trying to stay true to Hequat and the Mu Mystic backstory and why the CoT are trying to keep her from returning..
the spin on this is that the Mu have no loyalty to Arachnos when it comes to Hequat (which is listed in her back story as well) they worship her over Recluse.
Basically story wise, this is why I chose the route I did, but I can make some corrections in come stuff.
Thanks for playing the arc and giving me feedback its something I wanted ao I can this make this better
If anyone else would like to provide feedback please do so.
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Just to add:
Here is a quote from the link above in the OP:
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Also if you read here:| There is no more mention of Hequat until 20th century, when a fundamentalistic faction among the Mu Mystics of Arachnos who, longing for the return of their goddess and like their ancestors of old, served her above even Arachnos, Scirocco, and Lord Recluse, tried to contact her. No one knows what would occur if the goddess were to return to the modern world, but since all gods depend on worship to thrive, she is likely in a highly weakened state, given the small number of Mu zealots maintaining her cult. That could, however, always change |
http://wiki.cohtitan.com/wiki/Mu_Mystics
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| This group's history is intimately related to the old civilization of Mu, its conflict with Oranbega and the Circle of Thorns and, above everything else, their blind faith to their beloved goddess Hequat. The group's internal policies may be bizantine and, given their previous history, some in Arachnos wonder where their true loyalties are. |
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| Despite the harsh discipline in Arachnos' ranks, there is what it seems to be a fundamentalistic Mu faction among them of mystics who long for the return of their goddess Hequat and, like their ancestors of old, serve her above any other thing, Arachnos, Scirocco or Lord Recluse included. No one knows what would happen if the goddess would return to the modern world. However, it must be remembered that her hatred stemmed from the Oranbegans' refusal to bow down to the gods in all things, as she thought was proper for mortals. That aspect may bode ill for today's peoples and cultures |
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Hey guys,
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I posted my thoughts on the Goddess Hequat here:
http://boards.cityofheroes.com/showt...=1#post3021086
It got me thinking of making an arc for her. And thus.. the Arc ID is 427594 called "Find the Book of Mu" its about the return of the Goddess Hequat.
I am not an expert at writing this stuff but please let me know if the story made sense and how you liked the arc. Its only 4 missions, with CoT and a customized Mu group. (Read the back story of Hequat and that will make sense
http://wiki.cohtitan.com/wiki/Hequat
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