Hey there, this is my first post on here so although this may not be brilliant please can criticism be constructive ok, lets try this.
The lights spread out beneath him as he sat upon his perch, they winked blinked and glowed as he surveyed their beauty which mirrored that of the stars that burned in the cloudless sky as the cars played a song that the shadows danced to as they roared past filling the air with the sound of their droning engines. The towers on the skyline stretched high into the sky as if envious of the beauty of the night, trying so hard to reach it's perfection. The lives of millions were spread out beneath him and the beauty of the natural world lying before him was breath-taking, it was a wonder that such diversity and life could exist on something as small as the planet earth.
But as the beauty flowed around him, flowing into his veins, through his heart and burning in his soul a different type of music peirced the song of the city, the song of fighting, a harsh beat played by the guns firing and the shrill lyrics of those scared or dying as people rampaged and killed, destroying something unique and special.
Anger flashed across his face.
"why, why do they always do this." He asked himself as he launched off the top of the tower and plumetted to the ground the wind whistling past him as the ground rose towards him to welcome him back to her fertile bosom. He landed cat like on the floor, the very muscles within his body acting better than any suspension in the most advanced automatives, more proof that nature, if given the chance, is better than technology.
Setting off at speeds faster than that of his descent he sped through the town past the towering buildings and the cars that raced through the lighted streets, their head lights illuminating the world around them, the traffic pulsing through the city like a hearbeat, carrying everything the city needed in it's cells. Following the sound of gunfire he reached the alleyway, inside he could see two young men, lost to the flames, and one woman cowering in a corner, she was covered in bruises and cuts staring at the men who were deciding her fate.
Anger boiled within his body, surging through his stomach and lunging out of his lungs in a scream of absoloute fury that echoed from his mouth in snarl of fury that made the two Hellions, slowly, turn around as before them they saw all hell let lose.
The first man was incinerated before he could shout any quip or smart comment and as the second stared at the dusts of his friend floating slowly to the ground he looked back at their assailant who was slowly walking toward him. When he reached him the man lifted the Hellion up slowly by the throat and began to squeeze, the man screamed as he realised what was happening but his voice was cut short as his vertebrae snapped and he fell to the floor.
After composing herself Alysa got up and looked around, her heart was beating very fast and all she could concentrate on was a small peice of card floating slowly to the ground, on it were the words Zodian, i'm sorry...
Hey there, this is my first post on here so although this may not be brilliant please can criticism be constructive
ok, lets try this.
The lights spread out beneath him as he sat upon his perch, they winked blinked and glowed as he surveyed their beauty which mirrored that of the stars that burned in the cloudless sky as the cars played a song that the shadows danced to as they roared past filling the air with the sound of their droning engines. The towers on the skyline stretched high into the sky as if envious of the beauty of the night, trying so hard to reach it's perfection. The lives of millions were spread out beneath him and the beauty of the natural world lying before him was breath-taking, it was a wonder that such diversity and life could exist on something as small as the planet earth.
But as the beauty flowed around him, flowing into his veins, through his heart and burning in his soul a different type of music peirced the song of the city, the song of fighting, a harsh beat played by the guns firing and the shrill lyrics of those scared or dying as people rampaged and killed, destroying something unique and special.
Anger flashed across his face.
"why, why do they always do this." He asked himself as he launched off the top of the tower and plumetted to the ground the wind whistling past him as the ground rose towards him to welcome him back to her fertile bosom. He landed cat like on the floor, the very muscles within his body acting better than any suspension in the most advanced automatives, more proof that nature, if given the chance, is better than technology.
Setting off at speeds faster than that of his descent he sped through the town past the towering buildings and the cars that raced through the lighted streets, their head lights illuminating the world around them, the traffic pulsing through the city like a hearbeat, carrying everything the city needed in it's cells. Following the sound of gunfire he reached the alleyway, inside he could see two young men, lost to the flames, and one woman cowering in a corner, she was covered in bruises and cuts staring at the men who were deciding her fate.
Anger boiled within his body, surging through his stomach and lunging out of his lungs in a scream of absoloute fury that echoed from his mouth in snarl of fury that made the two Hellions, slowly, turn around as before them they saw all hell let lose.
The first man was incinerated before he could shout any quip or smart comment and as the second stared at the dusts of his friend floating slowly to the ground he looked back at their assailant who was slowly walking toward him. When he reached him the man lifted the Hellion up slowly by the throat and began to squeeze, the man screamed as he realised what was happening but his voice was cut short as his vertebrae snapped and he fell to the floor.
After composing herself Alysa got up and looked around, her heart was beating very fast and all she could concentrate on was a small peice of card floating slowly to the ground, on it were the words Zodian, i'm sorry...
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thoughts?