Hey ya'll! Just felt like posting a 'roleplay' story I had recently written and also shown to sg. Wondered also if anyone would have (what does one call it?) 'tips' on perhaps better story-writing..anyway I appreciate any comments or feedback. First 'contribution' onto these forums eee im nervous!
Thanks!
Chiefette
Part 1-"A True Hero"?
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Sirens Call, an innocuous place at first glance, rife with conflict and shows of combat. The idealistic, brazen dominator-otherwise known as "Mind over Matter" knew this would be a pivotal day in her new life under Lord Recluses guidance, she could prove herself so majorly with her actions here. Lord Recluse showed her the path; he managed to help her bear her pain on the counts of those heroes who so cowardly attacked her.
Walking to the top of the villains main fort in Sirens Call, she thought how the heroes had changed her life so much, all their idiotic, unreasoned attacks if they only thought about it more. Now she may be able to find them, they may reckon again on seeing that poor innocent woman now with such potential ..
She decided it immediately, might as well see what comes in Sirens Call, so, she departed from the base, in search of any adversary.
In the perfect predatory mood, Mind Over Matter glided from roof-top to roof-top with finesse, surveying the landscape, moving from cover to cover, it came to her easily..she could sense only one solitary presence in Sirens Call, yet it was so prominent, it was a good hero she reckoned, all the more prestige for taking this one down .Mind Over Matter followed from her senses and came to a caped woman, standing solitary looking out towards the villain base in thought .
This woman, was the established heroine, Chiefette- she had become legendary with her gifts of mental and storm control. Reports came to her of a maverick Arachnos operative coming to Sirens Call for 'unknown' reasons..she could forsee it anyway, she knew this maverick would come and be checked
Tut, tut, tut you little arrogant fool said Chiefette out loud, turning to face Mind Over Matter, I know youre there, come on and confront me, Chiefette chuckled confidently, her cape blowing slowly in the brewing wind.
Mind Over Matter knew this heroine, Chiefette..she was one of the force that obstructed her plight and attempt to live well when she was just a poor homeless citizen. At the time, she and a band of fellow unfortunates gathered outside a supermarket and begged and cried for food, there was little success.. then soon enough a squad of heroes came and forcibly dispersed them, yet when police came to clear up the scene later, that psychic conferred with the police. Chiefette was so uprighteous at the time, yet why? Why then did she lie and convince the police officers she and her friends were dangerous vermin and should be jailed until further notice ..that was just a heros selfish attempt for obtaining prestige Chiefette must have changed from that brattishness surely?
Chiefette grinned patronizingly and cooed as Mind over Matter stepped forward surely Well well, surprised to see me I take it? I never thought youd become so vile now . Mind over Matter flinched with the insult and whispered, still proud Youre just the same as you always were, you never see it do you, you think youre perfect dont you, why did you lie then to send my life on such a downward spiral why? . Chiefette giggled happily and sighed My my , so direct so direct, really like the ilk youve now joined, I saw a chance to fufill a goal, further my standing, what more to it, surely you can see then with your clearly superior mental strength!, Chiefette was frustrated unlike most villains, this one was able to deflect being mind-read. Mind over Matter shot back Its all from that raid you heroes did, dont you ever see, youre all the same as each other!
Chief visibly flinched Mind over Matters words struck her deep, she gasped The same , the SAME!? Why you..little..presumptious.., she didnt bother to finish the reply as then leaping forward, she conjured a tornado which savaged the steadfast villain mercilessly, Mind over Matter, concentrating, stood her ground, and in Chiefettes distracted mood, saw her chance to find some weakness with her mentally to win..so keeping upright, she focused, planting her feet firm against the windy onslaught.
Chiefette, seeing her enemy pause, stirred up the tornado so it continued to rip and rage, she did not pay attention to any rogue psychic strike
Mind over Matter easily resisting the raging wind, searched and gasped as in Chiefettes mind she heard a voice, a man, screaming panickedly, he kept saying *Dont do this, Im innocent!* .she realized her aggressor had more to her than met the eye.
The villainess stared at Chiefette with a piercing gaze, Chiefette taken aback by this, dispelled the tornado and stepped forwards arrogantly to Mind over Matter, thinking she had decided to give up. She was greeted merely with a question *Harold Kessler?*. The two super-powered women knew this conflict could turn nasty quickly, the heroine flinched at Kesslers name being mentioned and responded with a venomous whisper *Why ask about him hmm?*
The psychic villainess Chiefette saw before her smirked and cooed Oh I dont know, its so typical of a hero as prestigious as you! Doing your perfidious little job for however long and its so typical youd harm such civilians like Kessler, one of your earliest cases! Assisting the fools of the PCPD with apprehending a child murderer! You decide to take the job and in your naivety realize you cant find the perpetrator! So what do you do hmm? Go and falsely make an innocent civilian into a murderer for your own gains! You make me sick, like all your two-faced peers!
Chiefette scowled, knowing the position she had been shifted into, her eyes widened as she sensed something .many, many other people, armed with weaponry, she sensed they were on her side. *Longbow..* she muttered almost in remorse.
At that very moment Longbow Chasers glided through the air and arrived at the area where the two super-powered females were in contact. Special Ops Forces appeared as if from nowhere while Riflemen took up positions around the pair. The Officer commanding the Longbow Squads demanded from his aides for identification on the pair.
Sir! You damn well know one of them! Chiefette a Hero of the City! said one Longbow aide, However seems she has come across Mind over Matter , shes only to us a threat level of 35. Bit of a small fry yet reports show she has some distinct potential to her!
The Officer nodded and taking a megaphone issued an order Chiefette, apprehend that villain and hand her over to us immediately or well take her in ourselves. He knew secretly they couldnt take down a villain as unique as Mind over Matter however he merely trusted in the heroines sense of righteousness for this decision.
Chiefette knew she was at a crossroads, let Mind over Matter get captured and shed definitely spill what she knew on Kessler- thus crushing her prestigious career. However the dominator could not be killed right now, especially in front of all the Longbow present and coming reinforcements...she'd have to be apprehended later...
Looking at the twisted psychic before her, Chiefette focused for a few seconds, then whispered only two words *Escape now* .
Every Longbow soldier in the area suddenly buckled to the floor screaming and grabbing their head in pain, Mind over Matter, seeing how if she didnt escape the soldiers would regain control and surely take her down with this heroines aid, fled. For her, there was a plan to set in motion, Kessler's death would not lie forgotten!
Hey ya'll! Just felt like posting a 'roleplay' story I had recently written and also shown to sg. Wondered also if anyone would have (what does one call it?) 'tips' on perhaps better story-writing..anyway I appreciate any comments or feedback. First 'contribution' onto these forums eee im nervous!
Thanks!
Chiefette
Part 1-"A True Hero"?
------------------------
Sirens Call, an innocuous place at first glance, rife with conflict and shows of combat. The idealistic, brazen dominator-otherwise known as "Mind over Matter" knew this would be a pivotal day in her new life under Lord Recluses guidance, she could prove herself so majorly with her actions here. Lord Recluse showed her the path; he managed to help her bear her pain on the counts of those heroes who so cowardly attacked her.
Walking to the top of the villains main fort in Sirens Call, she thought how the heroes had changed her life so much, all their idiotic, unreasoned attacks if they only thought about it more. Now she may be able to find them, they may reckon again on seeing that poor innocent woman now with such potential ..
She decided it immediately, might as well see what comes in Sirens Call, so, she departed from the base, in search of any adversary.
In the perfect predatory mood, Mind Over Matter glided from roof-top to roof-top with finesse, surveying the landscape, moving from cover to cover, it came to her easily..she could sense only one solitary presence in Sirens Call, yet it was so prominent, it was a good hero she reckoned, all the more prestige for taking this one down .Mind Over Matter followed from her senses and came to a caped woman, standing solitary looking out towards the villain base in thought .
This woman, was the established heroine, Chiefette- she had become legendary with her gifts of mental and storm control. Reports came to her of a maverick Arachnos operative coming to Sirens Call for 'unknown' reasons..she could forsee it anyway, she knew this maverick would come and be checked
Tut, tut, tut you little arrogant fool said Chiefette out loud, turning to face Mind Over Matter, I know youre there, come on and confront me, Chiefette chuckled confidently, her cape blowing slowly in the brewing wind.
Mind Over Matter knew this heroine, Chiefette..she was one of the force that obstructed her plight and attempt to live well when she was just a poor homeless citizen. At the time, she and a band of fellow unfortunates gathered outside a supermarket and begged and cried for food, there was little success.. then soon enough a squad of heroes came and forcibly dispersed them, yet when police came to clear up the scene later, that psychic conferred with the police. Chiefette was so uprighteous at the time, yet why? Why then did she lie and convince the police officers she and her friends were dangerous vermin and should be jailed until further notice ..that was just a heros selfish attempt for obtaining prestige Chiefette must have changed from that brattishness surely?
Chiefette grinned patronizingly and cooed as Mind over Matter stepped forward surely Well well, surprised to see me I take it? I never thought youd become so vile now . Mind over Matter flinched with the insult and whispered, still proud Youre just the same as you always were, you never see it do you, you think youre perfect dont you, why did you lie then to send my life on such a downward spiral why? . Chiefette giggled happily and sighed My my , so direct so direct, really like the ilk youve now joined, I saw a chance to fufill a goal, further my standing, what more to it, surely you can see then with your clearly superior mental strength!, Chiefette was frustrated unlike most villains, this one was able to deflect being mind-read. Mind over Matter shot back Its all from that raid you heroes did, dont you ever see, youre all the same as each other!
Chief visibly flinched Mind over Matters words struck her deep, she gasped The same , the SAME!? Why you..little..presumptious.., she didnt bother to finish the reply as then leaping forward, she conjured a tornado which savaged the steadfast villain mercilessly, Mind over Matter, concentrating, stood her ground, and in Chiefettes distracted mood, saw her chance to find some weakness with her mentally to win..so keeping upright, she focused, planting her feet firm against the windy onslaught.
Chiefette, seeing her enemy pause, stirred up the tornado so it continued to rip and rage, she did not pay attention to any rogue psychic strike
Mind over Matter easily resisting the raging wind, searched and gasped as in Chiefettes mind she heard a voice, a man, screaming panickedly, he kept saying *Dont do this, Im innocent!* .she realized her aggressor had more to her than met the eye.
The villainess stared at Chiefette with a piercing gaze, Chiefette taken aback by this, dispelled the tornado and stepped forwards arrogantly to Mind over Matter, thinking she had decided to give up. She was greeted merely with a question *Harold Kessler?*. The two super-powered women knew this conflict could turn nasty quickly, the heroine flinched at Kesslers name being mentioned and responded with a venomous whisper *Why ask about him hmm?*
The psychic villainess Chiefette saw before her smirked and cooed Oh I dont know, its so typical of a hero as prestigious as you! Doing your perfidious little job for however long and its so typical youd harm such civilians like Kessler, one of your earliest cases! Assisting the fools of the PCPD with apprehending a child murderer! You decide to take the job and in your naivety realize you cant find the perpetrator! So what do you do hmm? Go and falsely make an innocent civilian into a murderer for your own gains! You make me sick, like all your two-faced peers!
Chiefette scowled, knowing the position she had been shifted into, her eyes widened as she sensed something .many, many other people, armed with weaponry, she sensed they were on her side. *Longbow..* she muttered almost in remorse.
At that very moment Longbow Chasers glided through the air and arrived at the area where the two super-powered females were in contact. Special Ops Forces appeared as if from nowhere while Riflemen took up positions around the pair. The Officer commanding the Longbow Squads demanded from his aides for identification on the pair.
Sir! You damn well know one of them! Chiefette a Hero of the City! said one Longbow aide, However seems she has come across Mind over Matter , shes only to us a threat level of 35. Bit of a small fry yet reports show she has some distinct potential to her!
The Officer nodded and taking a megaphone issued an order Chiefette, apprehend that villain and hand her over to us immediately or well take her in ourselves. He knew secretly they couldnt take down a villain as unique as Mind over Matter however he merely trusted in the heroines sense of righteousness for this decision.
Chiefette knew she was at a crossroads, let Mind over Matter get captured and shed definitely spill what she knew on Kessler- thus crushing her prestigious career. However the dominator could not be killed right now, especially in front of all the Longbow present and coming reinforcements...she'd have to be apprehended later...
Looking at the twisted psychic before her, Chiefette focused for a few seconds, then whispered only two words *Escape now* .
Every Longbow soldier in the area suddenly buckled to the floor screaming and grabbing their head in pain, Mind over Matter, seeing how if she didnt escape the soldiers would regain control and surely take her down with this heroines aid, fled. For her, there was a plan to set in motion, Kessler's death would not lie forgotten!