If I may take a stab, you're trying to farce an introduction. Introductions end in a name. So instead of "well, see ya, I'm off to level", You should build up to, "For I am Darkity Dark, and evil should phear my mad clicking skillzorz!" Or some such.
You have to have a beginning, middle and end. Your beginning is "20 years ago I was..."
Your middle is "My toggles are six slotted with end"
Your end should be something like, "Wherever there is evil, you will find my face prints on their carpets and shoes. Wherever there is injustice, you'll see me running for the safety of a police drone. And wherever there is opression, you'll find me broadcasting for a taxi bot to save my butt."
Just a suggestion. I'm not a published author.
I'm taking another stab at a Dark Armor hero, and I'm trying to create a biography/backstory that is both funny and pointed, while being readable.
Oh, and I'm also going to try and win those oh-so-common Biography contests.
This is pretty much what I'm thinking of using, does anyone have any advice?
I don't like the whole degeneration into a "conversational" tone, but I really don't know how to fix it...
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FH3AR ME.... I am the Dark Lord of the Seth, DARTH GIMP(age).
In a solar system 20 years ago and pretty far away, I was a fairly ordinary Cryptic Knight, but I was convinced by the Dark Powerset Side, and fell to be who I am today...a Farce to be Reckoned With!
Yea, though my toggles take more endurance to run than any 3 Invulnerability Tanks, I shall not fear the Blue Bar, for all my Powers are Triple-Slotted with Reduce Endurance Cost enhancements!
I may only do base damage, and have *bleep!* for Accuracy, but I've got the Stamina of a (weak, yet strangely runty) Energizor Bunny. I won't stop until I'm dead!
Which is rare, due to my overwhelming resistance to, er, Psi damage. Smashing/Lethal? Well, not so good. Oh, and I get one-shotted a lot, too. No, I *can't* take Dull Pain...that's Regeneration, you're getting confused.
Yeah, well I could have picked up Tough or Weave, but I didn't have room after taking all the darkity dark powers...yes, I know they are more powerful than my armors, and cheaper to run, too...
Well, fun talking to you, but I gotta go and get out of debt now, so I can level up and get Soul Transfer...man, that Combat Rez is gonna be GREAT! Ciao and stuff!
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Infaerna Who knew Fire/Fire Brutes were fun to play?