Kikokuma

hello everyone! i just made my first Story Arc and i'm asking for Feed back on it.
it's not really a "farm" mission, and it actually has a story. though the xp on it should be pretty good...

anyways please try it out and lemme know what kind of changes i should make.
if enough people like it i may make a part II. =D

the Arc# 242675

thanks everyone!